Lady Iliara

@jenwriter17 Yes, I’d like to continue beta reading all the chapters you put up, if you don’t mind.

Oooh…what’s this topic about and how do I join? @jenwriter17 @catwing @skredder @anyone 😛

@ingridrd So sorry for the late response! I have read through and critiqued chapters 1-2 and I’ll move on to 3-4 soon. 😀 The story is very intriguing. 😉

@notawriter @ingridrd @catwing Thanks y’all!

@jenwriter17  Awww…of course!  I know how hard it is to lose a pet.  ❤️

@jenwriter17 @kaya-young  Alrighty!  Here you go.  Thanks again!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/11AHdPPXbizqzep23-mmpjsj1HndllfhrEjVt5cOq1Oc/edit#

@sage-g @notawriter @ariella-newheart @sarah-anson

Could one or two of you possibly draw me a character, please? 🙂

Randal—is 17, has auburn hair, green-yellow eyes, and a soft smile.  He has a long white scar down the side of his neck.  Clothing-wise, anything casual, probably just a T-shirt and jeans.

Hopefully that’s enough info!  😉

@jenwriter17  @kaya-young  Thank you both so very much for putting time into commenting on this for me!  Would you like me to post the entire book here or…?

@kaya-young  Wow, thank you so much!  I can definitely post the entire book if you want.

Well, I have not completed any other full books, but the sequel to the one you’re reading now is in the works and I also have a Superhero WIP along with some short stories/novelettes.  🙂 🙂

@sarah-anson I know what it’s like to have a MC that just. Won’t. Be. Compelling!!! *tears out hair* The MC of my story that is currently on hold was like that. She had a backstory I loved, she was quirky, realistic, and had a story goal. But what I found was holding her back from being interesting (or even likeable) was that she was kind of in…[Read more]

@jenwriter17  The whole book is written, I just don’t want to overwhelm anyone with critiquing the entire story…unless you want to.  🙂

To those of you who are interested, here are the next two chapters of the book.  I’m pretty sure the fourth chapter is kinda confusing, so if you’d give me some pointers there I’d appreciate it!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-jzVzEBjTyvq5vKUBAGZ-0Lt4-_bWLJw1Uofs_59wmQ/edit

@jenwriter17 @kaya-young

Woah, no idea what happened to that first picture.  *scratches head*

And here are the pics…

So I found this the other day…

I wrote it when I was seven and the spelling is just horrible.  *facepalm*

I’ll write out the story since it’s hardly legible (and I’ll fix the spelling and grammar mistakes):

Once upon a time there lived a cat.  Now this cat was not an ordinary cat.  The cat has lost a leg.  The cat’s name was Pretty. 

There w…[Read more]

@catwing  I’m still developing her superpower but she can camouflage herself to blend in with anything.  🙂

@seekjustice I must go to bed now. Good night.
Hopefully you can patch up those plot holes.

@seekjustice I’m not deleting them… Just moving them to be more of side characters for this book. They each have their perspectives and stories. But all the POVs got muddled and confused readers when I was swapping between six different people. 0.0

@seekjustice So, so. I’m not liked editing to much and I’m having to get back into the swing of things.
But Jack is behaving. Just having trouble Showing, not Telling,
Also dealing with the hard truth that I have to change POVs in places and make a few MCs into side characters. :*(
(It will only be Alex, Jack, and Cele. Mostly…)

@seekjustice It’s Finding Secrets. The one I did all those collages for. 😀