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@rae @keilah-h @loopylin

Lucille

Lucy took a deep breath of the flowers, and passed some of them to Mel. This sniff test required a two-person court.

While the adults talked, Lucy watched Gabriel quietly, then glanced around the room. She wandered around, analyzing everything, from the table to the many skins.

Something had spilled on another…[Read more]

He’d bled on the floor more times than he cared to tell her. He hoped she wouldn’t notice more faint stains.

Bruh

@godlyfantasy12

So you’re trying to present Ara’s world to the reader before the inciting incident happens, and you don’t know how to translate the inner world to the outer world?
If so, wait a minute. We have the same problem. I’m trying to write the same thing. XD

The best I can say is to come up with a meaningful, but normal situation that re…[Read more]

@whalekeeper @looylin @kielah-h

Just to be clear, the flowers are bushes outside of the house. I don’t think I mentioned that.

Gabriel

“Was that your blood?”

Gabriel looked back at the rug, and nodded. He’d bled on the floor more times than he cared to tell her. He hoped she wouldn’t notice more faint stains.

“So are these the monsters you w…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Eek! Lol.

Wilhelm

He had been on the verge of telling Wolfgang that he wouldn’t aim for his sword – Wilhelm’s target would always be his opponent, not a weapon – when the boy vanished.

That door had a rough time of it that night. Wolfgang’s reentry rattled the cups left on their table.

“En garde!” Cried the madcap creature as…[Read more]

@elishavet-pidyon

Wolfgang 

He deposited the heavy weapon on the table with a clatter. “You’d win straight off if I tried with that–– Or I might actually knock your head off. I’m going to get my sword… just don’t hack at it if you please.”

He spead to the door and vanished. Racing down the corridor he leapt in the air with a whoop befo…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I’m wondering who is going to win this….

Wilhelm

He was in the middle of fitting his sheild onto his left arm. He kept his gaze on his work, but his eyebrows were rising into his hair. They were more trouble to keep in order than either his sword or his shield.

“Heavy weapons prepare us for pitched battle. Strength must be…[Read more]

@loopylin

Aww. I love him. He looks like a slightly snarky sweet heart with a big destiny.

@elishavet-pidyon

Wolfgang 

He surveyed the shield before setting it on the table. “I don’t need one of those.” He lifted his left hand in the air and tried an experimental flick of his wrist and shuffle step. The sword point wobbled and struck the floor. Wolfgang frowned. “These are very heavy weapons you have. I don’t see the sense in them…[Read more]

@loopylin

Ooo! I love this!

Also yeah, like @elishavet-pidyon said! Writing calls! I’m not sure how to make it accessible to everyone because not everyone uses Google chat. Which is what I normally use for calls. But we can figure it out.

@godlyfantasy12

You wrote more than 50k words, which is a lot of emotional effort when writing the series of your dreams. So first off, that’s awesome. You’ll have plenty of material to edit. You’re definitely burnt out from that. That sounds normal to me.

I’m currently at an ADORABLE bookshop/cafe and slowly wanting and feeling the nudge to g…

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@ellette-giselle

Hehe.

By the way, his arming sword is a little under a yard long. His great sword is probably five feet, a precursor to the Zweihänder sword if he was in our world.

Wilhelm

“So instead you use flimsy weapons? I don’t see the wisdom of that. What about glaves and halberds? But nevermind. I’ve another trainer here somewhere.”…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

I don’t have much advice, being in a similar situation myself. However, the thing that helps me the mostis just talking through plot holes and concepts. If you don’t have someone who can be a sounding board for you (in “real” life), I think most of us KeePers would be happy to be that. It’s nice to hear other opinions at the…[Read more]

@loopylin

Callum

The Stormwatcher legacy was impressive. Scary, even. Callum could imagine having visions, since he already knew half of the experience. Ellis had something to contribute to his family – something helpful. Maybe it didn’t require much ingenuity, which was something Callum needed because he had no born powers. But it sounded…[Read more]

@rae @keilah-h @loopylin

Lucille

Hydras were from storybooks, and even then, Lucy wasn’t exactly sure what they were. They sounded worse than a copperhead at any rate.

“Was that your blood?” she asked, pointing at the rug.

@whalekeeper Thx @loopylin @keilah-h

Gabriel

“This is where he found me.” Gabriel stood, walking to the window and throwing back the curtain. Outside was a sea of delicate white flowers with pink centers, the origin of that sweet scent. “I had been bitten by a hydra, he stumbled across me looking for the person who was killing the monsters in…[Read more]

@elishavet-pidyon

No worries. I like the response.

who says he’s leading a rebellion…..

Wolfgang 

He nodded eagerly, then eyed the sword with a critical glance. “I like you’d snap my rapier in two with that thing. We don’t use swords like yours nowadays you know. I wish we did,” he added with a longing glance toward the sharp sword…[Read more]

@rae

Let your crew know. You shouldn’t be concerned about how strong or weak you look.  That’s a minor issue. Falling over is a major issue. I’m not trying to wildly speculate, but isn’t there a possibility that you lose balance on a boat and pitch over? If you don’t tell anyone, there’s a risk of hitting your head or worse.

Many, many people…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Lol. He might need to learn to notice details if he’s going to lead a rebellion.

Also don’t remember if they already talked about family. Maybe I need to keep better track of details.

I kind of spoke for Wolfgang, but I tried to write it so you could change his lines as you like.

Wilhelm

“Reinhard is…?” Wilhelm looked back…[Read more]