Okay then… 🙂 I might as well just add both of the charries because I’m interested on how they’ll all interact with each other. If it gets to be too much, I’ll take one or two out!

So there’s Molly, who’s a runaway slave and has a fake/mechanical leg (made by Everett) that extends from her right knee down. She is…[Read more]

So… I have two other characters that I’d like to add because they could really use some character development, but I didn’t know if that would be too much…

I could take out my character I have now (Everett) and replace him with another. Or I could add both… I didn’t know what ya’ll thought. I just didn’t want…[Read more]

That’s kinda funny–not really, being sick is not fun–but I was also sick last week. Glad to hear you are better! Also, I just thought it was amusing that you guys call Everett, “Dark,” to shorten his alias sometimes because he hates when people give him nicknames. 🙂

Anyway…!

Everett

He side-glanced his…[Read more]

Apologies for the late response! My cousins were visiting all week! 🙂 I’m going to assume it’s alright if I take a turn since no one else has yet!

Everett

An ice crystal slid down his sleeve and fell to the dirty tile beneath his feet. The room their group had evacuated into was significantly warmer than the…[Read more]

Everett

When Hesh reached for his dagger, Everett did the same. These “statues” were strangely placed, almost strategically.

Whoever had placed them, had been expecting guests.

He clutched his dagger, trying not to shake too hard, and followed the group deeper into the freezing corridor. The animals were growing…[Read more]

Everett

He was about to ask why in the world they wanted to entering a room covered head to toe in ice. But Feather had said in her world, they stored food in machines like this to keep them fresh. Brilliant! Perhaps they’d find something to eat..?

All his hope evaporated as he followed the others through the large…[Read more]

Would you like to go next??

Ah, alright! 🙂

Everett

Everett worked his jaw as he weighed his options. He was starving and dehydrated, and exhaustion was creeping up on him. Perhaps this was one of those times it didn’t matter whether he could trust people or not. Did he have a choice?

He tried to remember whether he had left a dagger in his satchel or not,…[Read more]

Sorry for the late response!!! 🙂

Everett

“Judging from your question,” Feather asked, “you don’t happen to be the castle’s owner or know who it is?”

Everett forced himself to stop glaring at Rinzler and look at the girl instead, but the guy’s grouchy voice still rang through his head– if I hadn’t already re…[Read more]

Wow! That’s such a cool idea!

I wish I could help more but I just don’t know how! I feel like I would need to know more about the twins and how the actual magic system works with the whole “opposites and double gifted” thing.

I’m still trying to figure out how to display the themes in my book, but one of the best pieces of advice I’ve…[Read more]

Yay! Another character! Can I have a brief description?? It sounds like maybe another character from the Star Wars universe, but I could be wrong..? Also, I like the mysterious ‘dark past’ vibes!

Once again, I mean no disrespect! I apologize for my character’s attitude, and I think you guys’ charries are awesome!…[Read more]

Well, I guess I shouldn’t say all the secrets, but hopefully more! There is supposed to be a tenth book that I think will be the last one…

Sophie isn’t my favorite either, but I definitely admire that she isn’t perfect. I think that makes her realistic. My favorite character is Keefe! 🙂

Yes! I’m finding out the more I build up a…[Read more]

Oh, that’s such a smart idea! 🙂 I’ve heard of Tron before but have yet to actually watch it!

Everett

Their worlds? Different worlds? Several worlds? Different universe? Worlds converging? 

Everett tried to keep up his smirk, but with every word this girl–Feather–said, he felt the corners of his mouth drooping more and more. H…[Read more]

Hmmmm…. I like this topic, first off, because I also have some underdeveloped side characters, so I can relate.

Because of that, however, I may not be the most helpful, but I will try to offer some advice. I also think I remember you referring to this story about the mentor. But I don’t know much more that that so just keep that in…[Read more]

Oh! So you write fanfics???? Cool! I’ve never really dabbled in it myself but enjoy reading them! The one about Feather and her sisters sounds really interesting! I thought you had mentioned Rinzler was from Voltron at first instead of Tron and I was like, I’ve never heard of him XD

Yes!!!!!!! I love that series so much! The characters are great and that’s probably the main thing I look for in good stories! And the world is really cool too! I’m so excited/nervous for the next book because all the secrets are going to be revealed and we’ve been waiting for them for a while! Um… I think I’ve been into it since…[Read more]

Thanks! Ooooh! So they are like from some kind of sci-fi world it sounds like???

Yes! I love Star Wars! Feather sounds awesome! I’m so interested in your characters and their story now!!!

Everett

He scowled at the girl blocking his path. Why was she so persistent? If Everett had to guess, her and her comrades were trying to get…[Read more]

Quick question! Could you give me a brief description of your characters appearances?? I’d love to know more about them. You probably said something some time back but I’m not sure if I can find it…

Also, is Feather a girl or boy? I wasn’t sure so I didn’t really talk too much about them. 🙂

Ahhhhhh!!!! Yes! It seems you understand it so well, even though I didn’t explain my WIP very well (at least in my opinion XD). Daren feels very insecure about only having one hand and it affects her relationships greatly. Thank you for your kind words!

And your lack of commas is an interesting, and rather admiring, style! I like…[Read more]

Ooooh! Your characters sound super cool! Okay! I’ll try, but bare with me cuz I have no idea what I’m doing! I have next to zero role-playing experience!

Also, I apologized before-hand for my character’s attitude. He’s kind of rude sometimes…

Everett

He stumbled back, both because he lost his footing dropping to the ground, and…[Read more]

Alright, thanks! I’m going to be completely honest that I haven’t been following the story the entire time (I mean, it is over 400 pages…) so I’m not sure if  I’ll be doing this right or not, but please let me know so I can fix anything! I’m not really sure how to do this, but I guess I’ll try… 🙂

My character’s name is…[Read more]

Hello! My names Hallie! You sound like such a lovely person and your stories sound amazing! I’d love to hear more about them!

First, I have a question! What is your favorite punctuation????

Also…THOSE MAPS!!!!!!!! They are stunning! I’ve been really wanting to create one for my WIP but don’t really know where to start! Do you…[Read more]

Wow, I’m late to this! XD

But I was just wondering, from the rules stated at the beginning of the forum, if there are already ten characters in the castle and if there is not, could I add one??

I totally understand if not! Just curious! 🙂

First off! Cool pen name!

Second of all! DID I HEAR YOU ARE A KOTLC FAN????

(pls say so. It would be a tad embarrassing if I was just hallucinating…)

Anyways, hello! My names Hallie! How do you do?? I have been absent from the forum for quite a while but am excited to be back!!!

You’ve probably already answered this, but what genre…[Read more]

I just recently wrote a short story with a rather bittersweet ending, but no, not a tragic one… *sigh*

As bad as it sounds, I’d like to try a tragic ending sometime. I think the problem is I get to attached to the characters to want to ruin their lives in the end. Also, it’s like some kind of puzzle for me at the end of a story.…[Read more]

I think it’s by the Rick Riordan presents or whatever it’s called XD It’s a take on Mayan mythology, which I thought was pretty cool!!!

Chinese mythology would be awesome! I don’t know much about it, but I’d like to read a fantasy spin about it sometime!

@keilah-h

PUFFINS!!!!! Yes!!!!

Haven’t read the Green Ember series, but now I definitely want to!!! Those poems were pretty great!

The one about the ferret though XD I’d like to read more of them! Especially humorous ones!

Aye!!! Another homeschooler! I’ve been homeschooling my whole life as well!

Hmm, you seem to have my problem! Planning out your entire series, family trees, every single quirk about your characters (even the background ones), and yet you stare at a page with a few sentences… Yeah, sorry. When you figure out the solution, you tell me…[Read more]

XD This was a great topic!!!

@devastate-lasting

If you like Percy Jackson and the Olympians or similar books, you may find it quite interesting! <3

Hahaha!!!!! I think it’s brilliant!

Awww, your poor characters!!!! I want to read this story so much!

Hahaha!!!!!! Yes! My favorite romance trope is opposites attract!!!

I’ve been trying to write more morally gray characters and secret identities bc I love mystery too!!! Also love anti-villain and anti-hero tropes!!!!!

Oh!!! Peacocks!!!!!!!

LOLLLL glad I could help!!!

The grasshoppers in your story sound awesome! I think that’s such a cool way to incorporate such an underrated creature!!!!!

And the garden scene would be hilarious!!!!! XD

I LOVE turtles!!!!! A turtle that keeps secrets…why have I never thought of that!? I may have to use that!

@devastate-lasting

Duck…[Read more]

HoW aM I sUPPosED To chOoSE?!?!?

I probably use too many tbh, and I haven’t really thought about it until rn… Anyhow!!!! I actually agree with what @joy-caroline said about the “found family” trope! I was thinking about it the onther day and realized that I think every story I’ve every written may have that trope XD And I totally…[Read more]

…Woah, I don’t even know what to say.

These are amazing (HUGE understatement)!!!!! I’m no poet, but I like to dabble in poetry every once in a while! And when I do, I definitely enjoy it! It sounds like you really do! Is it bad to say I relate to the words you wrote a lot??? XD

Are you a poet?? Have you written anything else? If so,…[Read more]

Does anyone ever see many insects in books??

Like butterflies, ants, beetles, millipedes, caterpillars (I know they’re butterflies, but I never hear about them in this form either), grasshoppers, ladybugs, bees, etc…

I’ve heard dragonflies, spiders (technically not an insect), and lightning bugs getting tons of attention. Especially…[Read more]

Okay, correct me if I’m wrong, but does this example work??

A frog hopped onto the desk, right next to the ring. “Aww! He’s kinda cute!” the antagonist squealed. “Why would they send me such a harmless–” the frog swallows the dark ring, full of powerful magic that the villain had worked so hard to get his hands on for years….…[Read more]

Oh, sorry I haven’t been on here for a while!!!!

LOL yes!!! Story ranting is awesome! And characters are probably my favorite part of writing!!!!!!!!!

LOLLLL Thank you so much!!! I will totally let you read and critique it once I finish a few more scenes!

Heh, your dream movie sounds right up my alley! And yeah! That’s pretty much why I’m a panster!!! I’ll be writing a happy scene then all of a sudden one of the charries breaks down crying, “It was me! I was the one who killed your…[Read more]

Ha!!! Yeah, I don’t have an outline! I’m a panster so I don’t usually form an outline for a while! I personally have always liked fantasy and action shows and movies!!!! So the one I’m working on right now is like a twisted fairy tale kind of show! It follows four siblings–Goldilocks, Peter Pan, Robin Hood, and Red Riding Hood–The…[Read more]

After watching The Avengers, Lord of the Rings, Star Wars, and various other movies and TV shows, I’ve always been interested in making my own films!!! I’ve written a few scripts and short plays for school projects and have really enjoyed it! Sometimes when I need to work on dialogue for a book, I will write a script first so I can be…[Read more]

I do the same thing with my outline!!! My characters are even more random than me! XD

LOLLLL I definitely would steal my antagonist’s hat!!! It’s a pirate hat with a feather, jewels, and gold trimming so… even if I get slashed with a cutlass, it will totally be worth it! XD

Though I’m a little worried she might think the store is a stationary pirate ship with a TON of cargo! And she might challenge the manager to…[Read more]