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@linus-smallprint

That’s a pretty good addition to the scene! I don’t think that deviated from your story’s voice at all.

You’ll see. Then you will understand why other readers are mad at him. It wasn’t pretty.

Hehe, okay.

@linus-smallprint

even if it is his fault she was captured in the first place.

How did that happen exactly? Was it more of an ignorant blunder, or?

@linus-smallprint

Thank you. If you weren’t playing the advocate, would you take Ellette’s side?

I simply mean what I described. 👍 I’m not sure how it compares with the rest of your feedback discussions… I have very little context. XD

He he.

My mind reading powers are impeccable.

Thanks for the link by the way! I can’t guarantee I’ll read it…[Read more]

@theducktator

My brother is in Challenge 2, I am the frazzled senior trying to help him learn logic, debate, and Latin. 🙃

@ellette-giselle

Well, to be honest, I don’t know a lot of pree-teens who like to play dress-up and repeat whatever their sister tells them to say.

Good point. XD My siblings are a lot more willing to do stuff, but these are kids between the ages of 8 and 13. They still like to play “wolf fight” and “Indians.”

The funniest thing is, my most r…

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@ellette-giselle

Sadly, my biggest two never got filmed because that was the year all my guy actors were done dressing up and repeating lines. lol.

They were too cool for school, huh? XD

@rae @theshadow

Do you guys want to try joining up with another small group?

Aw, Barnes is trying to be the comforting grandmother to everyone!

*Gasp* How dare you, she isn’t even forty yet! 😂 I get what you mean. Honestly she would be a pretty grumpy grandma. The grandma who complains about kids but gives them cookies all the…[Read more]

Ah the way I gasped😭 that was perfect for what I’ve been planning for Dylan’s character arc 🤭

“…Love?” someone asked.

“Yes, my dear, delectable Dylan.”

And you’re such a good writer girl!! I love reading this!! 🤩

@raxforge

I am the asker, lol. I’m just gauging interest in using a screenwriting format. 😛

Has anyone tried writing a screenplay? Or wants to?

Sometimes I can give a kid an ‘adult’ responsibility and they snap out of crying. I don’t know if that would work here, Rae, but she’s trying. XD

@rae @theshadow

Barnes

“I was thinking we start down this corridor along the edge of the castle, and scour the place for clues and people,” Barnes told Percival.

The group waited a few minutes for Reid to calm his brother, who remained stubbornly curled up. He was still agitated.

Barnes was used to people who looked much younger than their…[Read more]

Of course you can do whatever you want, I’m playing the other side’s advocate so you have balanced reasons for whatever you do.

@linus-smallprint

(also, anyone else who is reading this, what do you think?)

You have a very sensible writer voice, with hints of humor and warmth. I think because of your semi-calm tone, you don’t seem like the kind of person who would write a super intense POV scene of shame for Eric, at least not until the arc’s climax.

And from what I can…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Fine. *pouts*

😂😂

@ellette-giselle

Joseph. Julian. Sabina.

Adrian… hehe. 🤪

@ellette-giselle

I think so. Are you sure he couldn’t be a church leader at seventeenish, if he’s one of the only believers in that town?

If that’s what you’re leaning towards, then go for it. Maybe pray about it and think a little longer if it’s a hugeee chance, though.

@ellette-giselle

Why does he have to become an elder? I think (if I’m understanding this right) if the important things are happening while he is seventeen, that’s where you want to be. Maybe he can be a part of the inner core group of the church without being an elder, sort of getting mentored by everyone else.

However, you’re right. If all t…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Probably. 🤔

Ehh, fine, you can take the rest of them. Just don’t do anything to Sabina or Joseph or Julian. 🤪

@ellette-giselle

Remember?!? I STOLE Joseph. So you can’t kill him!!!!!

I will let you borrow him to finish writing/editing your book if you say you will be NICE to him. Otherwise, he’s my character now.