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Thank you both so much!! 😊💛💛

The plan was 10 pages, and I only wrote 4. *Sigh* I feel like the problem with short stories is, I can never fall in love with them unless I get into the nitty-gritty details of a scene, which isn’t great if I want to draft the whole thing in one night. Done for now, will continue.

@hybridlore

I know. It was so cute!!

My poor boys! They are in a sure fix.

Nonlinear stories are so hard. 🙁 Why am I writing this? My brain is tied into knots right now.

@liberty

Same here…

@hybridlore

Yes, that was me. I don’t exactly want him to die…I just have a feeling that he might.

Poor 618. And 621. That government! 😡

Hear, hear.

Drafting a short story. :15

@ellette-giselle

Aww! Jonathan and Amber and Leo were so cute. 🥰

Poor 618. And 621. That government! 😡

@koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @theducktator @grcr @whalekeeper @power @hybridlore @liberty

TWO NEW CHAPTERS!!

@whalekeeper
Okay awesome! That is not really a feeling I want you to have. XD

@elishavet-pidyon @whalekeeper

Lois

“Not particularly,” Lois answered, assuming the question was directed at both of them. He forced himself to stop drawing and set down his pen, then his hid his arm with his sleeve again. He gave the kids who had spoken to Viktor a cold look, which none of them noticed. Then he looked at Viktor. “You seem…[Read more]

@whalekeeper HAHAHA

it is though

Researching other ethnic backgrounds feels so much harder than I want it to be. So many different places, so many different people.

@ellette-giselle

Thank you very much!

Of course! *Tips hat*

That was really helpful about the description thing. I think that makes more sense. I wonder too if I over-did the “buzz” words in dystopian literature because I was trying to cut down on description. XD I’ll totally look at that.

I get that. Descriptive words have so many different quali…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Yay! I’m glad you liked it! Yep, Jonathan and Michael are back!

@ellette-giselle

Yay! Jonathan and Michael are back!!

These were great chapters. I can’t wait for 618 (Rory?) to meet the rebellion. (I’m assuming that will happen, anyway.)

@liberty, I think they were your comments? I really hope you’re wrong about Michael dying. 🥺😢

@whalekeeper

I’m good with that! It’s a fun group of expected differences and surprising similarities.

@loopylin That would be interesting. 😂 I have a feeling she fights rough.

I guess I should answer Hugo’s question, lol.

Viktor

“Physical education. All the high school kids will be there.” Hugo said it lightly, but there was a pause at the…[Read more]

@liberty

lol. Well good.

@ellette-giselle

Yes… I did…. (I have an aspiring pilot of a brother with pilot friends, so yes. XD) but I also invented this plane so I have a little leeway.

Ah, right! I forgot about that. Neat!

why, did something stand out that seemed incorrect?

Nope, it’s actually the opposite. I was so impressed by how realistic it all sounded.