Jaybird

@linus-smallprint

Ooo, that chapter was very well written. I was feeling very tense, even though I knew what was going to happen. lol.

Yeah, Tyn is in a good position. Have her do it. This will be so, so bad for Eric. Plus, Tyn is in a bad mood, so she may even scold him.

I have never met a guy that didn’t absolutely hate it when a girl scolded him.

@linus-smallprint

Yup, it’s Eric. (How did you know?)

um…. because it was obvious since Martha got captured that he was a liability, and by the chapter you just wrote I knew he was going to get caught or alert the soldiers or something. (I may overstudy literary patterns.)

Sooo, maybe I’m blind, but I’m not seeing the problem……….. w…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

It occurs to me that Sabina and Julian are similar. Both have a brother who became a Christian, and they both thought he had gone crazy, which made them resistant to hearing the gospel and angry at whoever shared it with their brother. So I’m wondering if Sabina is going to recall how she acted and how this may impact her i…

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@the_lost-journal

oh my goodness.

Are you serious?

We can move this conversation to a new forum I guess.

@hybridlore

I write a very wide variety of things.My dystopian stuff is me being a conspiracy theorist.

This one is about a young farmer living in a country that faced Civil War plus a 3rd Word War. The country was split in half and the East in uninhabitable and forbidden, and the West is under dictatorship. The idea of family has been…[Read more]

@hybridlore

It’s called Forbidden.

It’s dystopian.

@linus-smallprint

Oh my goodness.

That is so bad.

I love it!!

@hybridlore

uhu. We’ll see about that.

I’m currently trying to wrap up another novel, but I may post more later. If not, maybe Monday morning.

@hybridlore

Oh no. I will not change my mind.

So I’ll just keep writing away, but if the protection squad activates then I’ll deal with it. lolololol.

@hybridlore

Too bad you didn’t know about this before.

Now you’re too late to save Adrian.

BRAWWWWWHAAAAAH

@hybridlore

You better add that those are my characters, because I know at least Freedom has a Leon. And she’s actually been pretty nice to him.

Lately.

@hybridlore

HEY!!!

I haven’t done anything to them!

yet…………….

lol. Okay, you can have them for now.

I know I’m not super keeping up with this topic, but I’ve been praying for every prayer request that shows up! 🙏 <33

@whalekeeper

Yeah, that makes so much sense!

Oh yeah, I get that. I have a lot of writing knowledge, I just don’t always apply it 💀😂

@hybridlore

The protection squad was formed for Freedom and Godlyfantasy’s characters. Let’s see, I think Riker, Paxton, and….. ugh, I can’t remember. There were a couple other on there. I think Leon got added too. They would go and kidnap them so that Freedom and Godly couldn’t kill them. Then they would have to try to get their characters…[Read more]

@hybridlore

You like Julian and Leon, eh?

Hmmm. *makes dark and devious plans*

lol. just joking.

maybe.

@hybridlore

I know I did.

Someone threatened to add Rory to the protection squad, but I think Joseph needs it the most. lololol.

@hybridlore

Oh go ahead and keep reading. I was meaning you aren’t someone who has gotten backstory detail because you asked too many questions and I gave in and answered. lolololol.

Yes! You are completely correct. Except they were betrothed. They were supposed to be married the month after she died. So, yeah, that was the initial blow, and…[Read more]

@hybridlore

yes, you would be right.

Kill Joseph?

Hmm.

I like it.

lololololol.

Don’t worry, the book is already written, so weather he lives or dies is out of your hands. 😉

@whalekeeper

No girl, I love it! I think the key to writing chaotic scenes is pacing. Like if you have a lot of long sentences people are going to get confused, but in your case, you stuck to shorter/mid-length sentences and sprinkled in only a few long ones. It worked really well 👌