Jaybird

@grcr

Sounds good! Tag me whenever you’re ready.

@elishavet-pidyon @whalekeeper @loopylin

“He gave the kids who had spoken to Viktor a cold look”

I want to see a book where when a character does that it actually makes ice start growing on the other person. Just something that comes to me when I see that phrase.

@grcr

How do you feel about another character, or you want a break?

@koshka     @keilah-h     @elishavet-pidyon    @theducktator    @grcr     @whalekeeper     @power    @hybridlore     @liberty

TWO NEW CHAPTERS!!

@hybridlore

I know. It was so cute!!

My poor boys! They are in a sure fix.

@hybridlore

Yes, that was me. I don’t exactly want him to die…I just have a feeling that he might.

Poor 618. And 621. That government! 😡

Hear, hear.

@koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @theducktator @grcr @whalekeeper @power @hybridlore @liberty

TWO NEW CHAPTERS!!

@whalekeeper
Okay awesome! That is not really a feeling I want you to have. XD

@hybridlore

Yay! I’m glad you liked it! Yep, Jonathan and Michael are back!

@liberty

lol. Well good.

@ellette-giselle

Yes… I did…. (I have an aspiring pilot of a brother with pilot friends, so yes. XD) but I also invented this plane so I have a little leeway.

Ah, right! I forgot about that. Neat!

why, did something stand out that seemed incorrect?

Nope, it’s actually the opposite. I was so impressed by how realistic it all sounded.

@liberty

Ooo yay! So glad!

Yes… I did…. (I have an aspiring pilot of a brother with pilot friends, so yes. XD) but I also invented this plane so I have a little leeway.

why, did something stand out that seemed incorrect?

@ellette-giselle

I went through all six chapters! I’m thoroughly enjoying the story! I’m excited to see Cassion appear.

By the way, how much research did you do for all the jet tech stuff? Did you actually look into all those terms they talked about?  Especially Jason’s engineering talk…

I was going to share my thoughts, but then this thread would start to become redundant, lol! I pretty much agree with what everyone else has said. And as for the passage people keep referencing about food offered to idols and becoming a stumbling block, that’s 1 Corinthians 8.

@koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @theducktator @grcr @whalekeeper @power @hybridlore @liberty

TWO MORE NEW CHAPTERS. FOUR IN TOTAL TODAY.

And goodnight.

@theducktator
I’m glad you’re happy with Evan’s board. How is Evan the duck btw?

Sounds good! I’ll be looking forward to sunday comments!

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TWO NEW CHAPTERS. Possibly more later.

@whalekeeper

Thank you very much!

That was really helpful about the description thing. I think that makes more sense. I wonder too if I over-did the “buzz” words in dystopian literature because I was trying to cut down on description. XD I’ll totally look at that.

Hmmm, that’s interesting what you are saying aboyt the Christianity thing.…[Read more]

@keilah-h

He’s one of the villains.

-he has a pet crow or raven

Actually, I wasn’t thinking of it like that…but that makes a lot of sense. Okay, I’ll add this to the story!

Yes! You are correct!

@hybridlore

Wow, it looks great! But this seems like a sad character or a villain. 😢

Yup. But thankfully…something good happens.…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Wow!! That was fast!

Okay awesome! I’d love to see your answers to the questions!

Hmm, I guessed you might be the one to bring that up. I think we both have different beliefs on this in general, but if there are some things you want to talk about, then I’m willing to listen. I think it may end up one of those impasses like…[Read more]