Elishavet Elroi

@theducktator

Aha, thank you. Fixed that.

Thank you so much for the feedback!!!!

DON’T KILL EVAN. I BEG YOU.

Oh how tantalizing this sounds…….. it would be such a sad death scene……………..

@rae

Yay!!! I am so glad that you had a good time!!!!! And I am so glad that you did it! That sounds like an amazing day!

Also,

Also, apparently I haven’t shared the mock cover yet!! (At least in this forum) Here it is! (At the end of the story XD)

Also…

Look! I found little Hallie!! 🥰

@savannah_grace2009 @theducktator @grcr @smiley @keilah-h @theshadow

Ok guys… 👀 I know it’s a lot to read, but I’m dropping the last 6 chapters!! Enjoyyyy! And then give me alllll the feedback! I’m planning to finally start on the official third draft soon.

Chapter 27

Hallie rolled onto her back and let out a sigh, staring at the dark ceiling…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Girllll, you’re so sweetttt 🥹 Thank you so much!! Your comments mean so much and are one of the reasons I keep on going with this book bc I know there will other people out there who will like it just as much 😭🥰❤️

OMC GUYS GUYS GUYSSSSS
I FOUND A SONG FOR EASTON

It’s “Cars and Phones” by David Dunn

It almost made me cry but…

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Just in case… (also lmk if the doc isn’t working or you can’t edit/access it)

KP Connection Doc

@keilah-h

Wow!! You are getting so much better at guys and girls! I can totally tell which is the girl. This looks really good!!

@the_lost-journal

Lol

thanks! That one isn’t out yet, but I do have some e that are published and for sale if you would ever be interested. 🙃

@grcr

OH MY WORD!!!!

Looking at it I suddenly realized how many of them I asked you to draw!!!! I can’t believe you pulled that off! My limit is about three people per picture and then I die. XD

THEY LOOK SO GOOD!!

Put it this way, I looked at it and new exactly who each one was, so that was brilliant!  Oh man, I can’t stop laughing…[Read more]

@elishavet-pidyon

Haha!!!

@rae

Oh man!!

I’ll be praying, Ruth! Please keep us updated!

@hybridlore

hmmm. What do you think of Me just removing the last paragraph completely? Would that be enough?

yes, I designed all of it.

@koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @theducktator @grcr @whalekeeper @power @hybridlore

I made some edits on the cover after some of the feedback I got.

@keilah-h

Lol, my characters are pretty real to me, and I guessed yours were to you. lololol.

You should totally try that!

@keilah-h

I was just listening to Ron’s theme song and I thought you and Sniper would enjoy it. XD

@theducktator

Lol, it’s still in the works. 😉

@the_lost-journal

those are funny. I just did my own because I was in the car and didn’t have access to my quote folder so I did some from my own book because I knew I wouldn’t accidentally misquote them. XD

@hybridlore

lol. Maybe.

Glad it was helpful!

@hybridlore

Lovely. You disabled copy and paste on the doc. Now I have to do it all the hard way. XD

Okay, feedback answers.

OVERALL

What was your overall impression of the story?

Not sure entirely what you are looking for, but I walked away feeling really excited for the next book and also really refreshed as this is one of my…[Read more]

@koshka

Aw thanks!!!

Would you agree, @power ?

Any suggestions. (besides the odd shapes near his neckline…. which was a reminder for me to clean it up with a brush but I forgot until just now.) and the couple typos already mentioned?