Jaybird

@hybridlore   @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @liberty

HELLO EVERYONE!!!! I’M BACK!!!!!!!!

I survived– barely, and am well and alive– sort of.

(Came down with a nasty cold the minute I got home. Ugh.)

Anyhow, it’s so good to be back!! I have the next section, and I may post another today as well. I hav…[Read more]

@loopylin

… May I ask what’s in Alpha’s pockets?

Ha! Took me a second to figure out where this is going……. I’ll be surprised if they’re both still alive and out of jail by the end of the day.

@theducktator

*gasp* It’s a date!

Yes!! 🤭 In my first draft I actually never wrote a scene of their first study sesh together…do you think I should add that in for the second draft??

When what, Tyler? 👀 I want to know…

I would like to know as well… 🤣

Definitely left that open for the imagination or a future short story &#x1f44…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Ok, so I told you I’d finish reading your book by the end of February, and I did! But I only started like two days ago. 🤣 Here are my thoughts! (Excuse any typos, I was doing this in the car, lol!)

Ok, so the biggest thing I noticed was the lack of hope throughout the story. The characters seemed to think about death a lot…[Read more]

@freed_and_redeemed

I have this forum open on my laptop. I’m gonna tag you to see if you’re able to find it again. If not, oh well. Just thought I’d give it a try! 😉

@the_lost-journal

You can also do that but do “is this a female” because that seems to be popular theme XD

(where this super cool person is wearing a mask and then they remove their mask and its a GIRL 😮

Immediately comes to mind…….

@whalekeeper

Oh, did you have a subplot POV on the side following the rescue?

No, two of my side characters were spies and they kept reporting the enemy and allies movements back to the MC. Plus, at one point when the MC was captured two of the officers get a message and kind of act startled. They leave the room, but the reader hardly notices…[Read more]

@koshka

uh yeah! Poor kid needs it!
(I gotta work a Leo into his actual book.)

he’s gotta enough hands! Pfft!

Rory

Rory smiled slightly. Sometimes Leo’s words completely flummox him, but Rory had learned to read tone and body language over words long ago. He wasn’t exactly sure what Leo meant, but he understood the tone.
“so… what do you ne…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Uh, big brother mode just got activated.

Leo

Rory looked… lonely. Leo reached over and ruffled the kid’s hair, not stopping to think that he was probably too old for that. He needed a childhood. “Welp, now you’re stuck with me too, so I guess you’ll see how blessed Quincy is.”

He laughed and scooped up a handful of metal…[Read more]

@koshka

Rory shrugged. “I don’t know what siblings are supposed to look like. I don’t even know if I have any of my own.” He shrugged again and picked out a few more screws. “Quincey is a fortunate boy,” he said, softly.

@ellette-giselle

Leo

Leo chuckled and shook his head. “Do we look related? But I’m the one who pulled the little monkey from a shelled out hole, so I guess I have as much right to claim him as anyone else.”

He leaned back against the couch.

@koshka

Rory

Most People would have been taken aback. But not Rory. Leo’s story sounded pretty normal. In fact, better than what he’d always known.
but one thing snapped our attention him like the crack of a whip. “Wait a moment… Quincey isn’t related to you? I thought you said he was your brother!”

@ellette-giselle

Oh goodness yes. XD

Leo

Soldier. Yes…and no. Another sigh caught in his throat.

“Yes, but no. I don’t really know what I’m doing here.” He leaned back against the couch. The floor felt cold through his work pants.

“I was apprenticed to Admiral S. Faltack at twelve years old as a novice engineer. Silvia’s always been smart,…[Read more]

@freed_and_redeemed

I like the changes!! I’d just caution you to have more new conflicts than old. It’s easy to fall into the old loop. Instead think of challenges they will face as they try to build a friendship, rather than a loop of old struggles.

Just a little heads up! (I’ve had to learn the hard way and I hoped to pass on some of that…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

haha, well, I am a lover of well done death scenes. Especially if the characters and author is a Believer, otherwise it’s a little depressing.

hmmm, well, I just can’t stand cheesy rescue/escape scenes.

uh… let’s see.
Faramir. Don’t know if you’ve read LOTR, but his rescue and recovery makes sense. Gandalf saved him, and Pippin…[Read more]

OH, and I’m also in the process of reformatting/reediting Freedom’s Fire to fix what a scam company ruined and where things needed to be edited just a tiny bit, so y’all can also look forward to a revised edition of Freedom’s Fire hopefully before too long🤭

OH, and Pinterest board for Book #3 so y’all can begin to get a feel for what the story…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 hehe I’m glad you’re excited🤭 @ellette-giselle @rae @keilah-h @theducktator @grcr @highscribeofaetherium @koshka @elishavet-pidyon @anyone-else-idk-lol-?

Soooo I just wanted to say that me having this fantasy idea doesn’t really change anything about the Broken and Redeemed Trilogy. Though I love this new idea, Leon/Riker…[Read more]