Jaybird

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The next Sabbath, Hans did not return, but Julian was pleased to see Marius slip in and sit down. With him was a young man who appeared to be in his mid to late teens. Marius leaned over and whispered something to his companion who nodded. Ju…

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@ellette-giselle

*squealing with excitement* I can’t wait to hear about it!

@liberty

Something I haven’t mentioned. I’m doing it between any possible sequel to CR.

@ellette-giselle

Wait…is this the second book in the CR series? Or a new story you haven’t told me about?

@liberty

I have a book I’m about to start writing once I wrap up CR, and I think you’re gonna go head over heals for the MC. Or the MC’s best friend. One of the two. It’s going to be a you sort of book. 😂

@linus-smallprint

I don’t know. It didn’t really stand out to me, but then from your notes I knew it was going to happen.

Whaley did make a strong point.

I think you could go either way.

Honestly, maybe a mix is best.

Either your original way with a little more listening, or Whaley’s way with a little more anger.

@linus-smallprint

yeah, the girl slaves were in the house.

Okay…. maybe. That’s a big gap between the twins tho. I may change it. I have a new character in his 20s coming in.

@rae

I’m a little swamped, but tag me and I’ll try to join at some point. 😊

@rae

I like it! I think the part in the field is the only thing I would fix honestly. But that’s your choice.

Like I said, it’s a delayed hit.

I’ll probably cry tonight. 😂

@koshka

Imperial soldiers are young.

I only have two other teens.

@ellette-giselle

you are insufferable.

Why thank you!

CALLED IT!!

As I was editing I was like….. this is going to be her favorite character!

*sheepish grin* I guess you know how to write a “Liberty’s favorite character” now.

@ellette-giselle

True, but you couldn’t really make him 60, and you do have a lot of teens.

@theducktator

I know, right? XD

@keilah-h

My sister sent it to me. I’m not sure where she found it.

@liberty

Liberty…..

you are insufferable.

😂

NOTHING about Marius and the prince?

 

Oh, and…Dietrich sounds like a very interesting character. I hope you don’t kill him since I like him.

CALLED IT!!

As I was editing I was like….. this is going to be her favorite character!

@koshka

Uh, 21 is still between 16-30

@ellette-giselle

that’s all you have to say about that section?!?!

*nod*

Oh, and…Dietrich sounds like a very interesting character. I hope you don’t kill him since I like him.

@ellette-giselle

Why not bump Hans to twenty-one? So small a change shouldn’t mess up your plotting ect. but it looks like a new number. You do have a lot of ‘teens.

@linus-smallprint

Also, as for them majority being males, I grew up in a household of boys, and my sister came along when I was already in my teens. Sooo…. boys have always been easy for me to write because I can watch them. I find girls harder because I don’t really live with older girls.

@linus-smallprint

Nice.

ugh!!! Why did I know it would be you who would say that?! 😭

This is a big step for me! I used to only write people my own age or eighteen. Eighteen was the magic year that was always perfect to write. 😂

I have had some older characters…… somewhere……….. I know there were some.

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