Jaybird

@grcr

No problem. Someone else mentioned it seemed out of place, and maybe use a part of it later.

Glad it was funny though!

Ok, in just a sec I’ll send chapter two. Let me skim it real quick to make sure there aren’t any horrid errors that are clearly visible. lol.

@grcr

So keep the fountain sword scene or not? Now I’m confused. lol.

@savannah_grace2009

No your suggestions are amazing! They are just what I have been looking for!

@savannah_grace2009

Ok then. No worries. I’ll split it up. Right now this is just ideas. I mean, you guys are seeing this stuff literal the minute after a type the last word of the chapter. One I get farther into it I’ll have a more concrete setup.

@trailblazer

Awesome!! I’m glad you like the new beginning!

I should have chapter two out here in a few.

Oh good idea. I’ll do that with the thought thing.

@savannah_grace2009

Ooo!!! I like Freedom already!!! I love really sad scenes and doing bad things to characters. It’s all for a purpose of course, and it needs to be done. But…… it’s also fun to watch readers cry. lol.

@trailblazer

Ok, thanks! Haha, maybe my brothers and their friends are more wild, but it’s younger or older brother annoying each other around here. lol.

What did you think of the rewrite? was that better? I tried to make a few things a little clearer and also add some action in the beginning. If you still think it doesn’t build enough action…[Read more]

OK, I went ahead and rewrote some stuff in the first chapter. is this better? (I put the new stuff in bold so y’all don’t have to read the whole chapter over again.)

 
Chapter 1
Julius ducked a blow aimed for his head. He jumped back a step as his opponent quickly followed up the swipe with a thrust toward his chest. The enemy stumbled slightly…[Read more]

@trailblazer

Yes. All the blog posts. sorry for the confusion. lol.

YAY!!! I thought I’d give that a shot and see if that was what y’all meant for me to do. Now that i see it was and how easy it is I bet y’all were laughing because I was making it so over complicated. lol.

WOW!! Thank you all! This is so helpful!

OK, I’ll mention the thing about the gods first. So, in the time of Nero things were starting to slip. There were many, many slaves who had come from wars, and a lot of their religion, or lack thereof, had started to rub off. There were several emperors after Nero who wanted to “reclaim the glory of…[Read more]

@freed_and_redeemed

Yes, even all the “cringy posts” Which I actually didn’t find a tone of “cringy” ones. I was reading stuff back from 2010 or 2011, depending on when Kingdom Pen started. I actually fell for whoever’s April fools joke it was to say that Kingdom Pen was closing down!! I was reading and it was saying that this had been closed…[Read more]

and I know there are a lot of “Pirate” novels out there, but this will still be historical-fiction more than anything.

It’ll show more of the realities of piracy, rather than the glamorized piracy that really isn’t realistic, and will also be a book that will show the realities/harshness of the British Royal Navy in the 1700s, and the brutality…[Read more]

@esther-c @keilah-h @rae @theducktator @savannah_grace2009 @koshka @loopylin @mineralizedwritings @anyone-else-idk-lol-XD

What began as something for me and my siblings to try for fun has become a book idea.

I made an aesthetic for the MMC (Male Main Character) of this new book idea…hehe.

Y’all, I loved him the minute I created him😂💖💖

Soooo,…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

OK, fun fact, I have read everything on here from day one of Kingdom Pen!! (It was a lot to read but completely worth it!)

Even all that cringy writing I posted two years ago?? 🫠🫣

What does everyone do on here beside waiting to ambush new members with a slew of questions?

😂😂

post scenes and break hearts. That’s what I do. And…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Lukas

Lukas bit his lip, unsure of what to say or do next. He had no way to relate to what Liv was going through. But he had to comfort her somehow. He gently directed her towards the bench, sitting down beside her. He kept his arm around her shoulders.

“C-can I…” His words caught his throat and he suddenly rethought what…[Read more]

WOW!! awesome! Thank you so much for y’all’s help. I only have one chapter in a place where I would call it more then ideas. (I just started the book today. I’ll have to put more of it there later. I can’t wait to hear feedback from other authors!

🤣🤣🤣

@stephie

This time I will participate and will not forget!!! Lol XD

@savannah_grace2009

You’re almost at the climax?!

*me still trying to figure out the beginning* *distant sobbing*

Great job!

Yeahhh, sort of, lol.

Girl, just take your time. This book has been pretty easy for me to write, but some of my other ones, not so much. 😂

And oh my goodness…do I want to know????!?!?!

Maybeee…. 👀 I will gladly share…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 @trailblazer

*sits in a bean bag chair contentedly watching your conversation with tea and cookies*