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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 9 months ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @grcr
NEXT SECTION
The next morning when Joseph woke, he lay in bed a moment, trying to remember what had happened the day before. All at once it came back to him and he scrambled to his feet. Yanking on his vest he hurried into the hall and knocked on Asher and E…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Art Sharing For All 🙂 in the forum Art 1 year, 9 months ago
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 9 months ago
Thanks so much for the feedback! I’m feeling pretty confidant with this new switch, so you can delete the old version. lol.
What’s with suddenly swapping the governor in this new version?
well, a few reasons.
1. Flows better with the idea that they just opened the gates after 7 years.
2. Why else would Asher and Eric have s…[Read more]
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Esther replied to the topic Art Sharing For All 🙂 in the forum Art 1 year, 9 months ago
I love that!! I love how you can see so much personality in each person! <33
So cuteee! Yesss, she needs to become a new character!!
That looks soo good!!!
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 9 months ago
The humor in that chapter is so good. lol.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 9 months ago
Good, good. I’m glad this is better.
Yesterday we reached Acts 12 in a sermon series at our church, and I almost started laughing because it was pretty perfect. So yeah, that’s where I got my inspiration.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 9 months ago
The ship.
The way you interact with one another would be very awkward if you weren’t.
Just saying.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 9 months ago
Asher would not appreciate you bringing that up again. lol.
No, not much to rewrite. Just a little.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 9 months ago
Okay, I see what you mean. Eric was just teasing when he was being formal.
I’m envisioning a much larger cut. As I said, a “gash”And actually, depending on where the cut is, you can bleed out.Maybe not from something like that, though. That might be overdoing it. This is my first draft of this section. 😉
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 9 months ago
So, now that I’m going with this version, do you have any overall thoughts about the section?
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 9 months ago
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 9 months ago
No, you can’t just say that. Give me a literary reason why I should do this rather then the other one. Why is this better?
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 9 months ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @grcr
ALTERNATE NEXT SECTION!!!!!
Please be honest as y’all read this, because saving the boys is going to be a HUGE change. However, I think it may be the right one, and some interesting things happened that makes me think so. However, I am still on the edge, a…[Read more]
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Liberty replied to the topic Animal RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 9 months ago
Oh! That’s a relief! I wasn’t sure how to make my characters interact with a 2D dog!!!
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 9 months ago
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 9 months ago
Do you wait to figure out the psychology of the character during the writing, or do you graph that too?
Not exactly sure what you mean by that……..
(Sorry, I don’t really do technical names. I just do whatever I’m going to do. lol. If that makes sense.)
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Liberty replied to the topic Animal RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 9 months ago
I also forgot to mention that he’s a cardboard cutout right now: dry, without a personality, but with some sort of 2D substance I’ve inserted into him which goes along the lines of “you were a bad person, now you’re trying to change, good luck.”
Wait, he’s 2D?? Or is that figuratively? Would you mind explaining?
But, yes! That will…[Read more]
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Liberty replied to the topic Animal RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 9 months ago
There wasn’t really a story, Fantasy RP was set up to have a loose story. Animal RP is kinda of like the other RPs where there real isn’t a story but the RPers make the story up as they go along.
Okay, that sounds fine.
I am a little busy now a days, so I won’t be very helpful in getting the story moved along, so it may be better if you…
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Liberty replied to the topic Animal RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 9 months ago
Sure thing!
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Liberty replied to the topic Animal RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 9 months ago
That’s totally fine! I think Duckator said the same thing.
By the way, if you do turn a character into an animal, you could make it so that they were always an animal, not turned into one. Either way, it’s up to you! I didn’t even think of having them know that they were once human! That’s a funny concept!
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