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@elanor

She looks gorgeous! I go to a barn in the summer, and my equine bestie is a bay Thoroughbred. She’s super pretty and super sweet. 😉 Was your horse a Paint?

Ah, Tolkien, the master storyteller. He ranks high among my own personal favorites, partly because of how gifted he was. I haven’t heard of the other two authors you mentioned before…[Read more]

@anika123

So I also read your chapters you posted, and I find the plot very intriguing!! It’s well made as far as the actual story, I found it exciting and curiosity invoking!

for improving the sentence structure, I would say to add more motion to the characters, wide eyes can be used for surprise or fear, and raised eyebrow for skepticism, gasp…[Read more]

@iluvhim18

oh ok cool

like i said i don’t know much about the story

glad to be of assistance!

@iluvhim18

what if she abdicates being queen? is she under 18? you could do where if they’re under 18 a lord protector can rule in the young monarch’s stead? This has happened in European countries with child monarchs…

idk if that is helpful or not…

@beth-darlene

That’s awesome! 😀

@devastate-lasting

ok cool!

yes… she’s part Silyan, and then she has Brennavaian, Elphin, Star-Eye, Phelanian, Bardan and Peluvaro in her bloodline too.  she’s 5’4″, ash-blonde hair and eyes that shift colors and is a little tigress when you make her mad, which is a bad idea, since she has Bardan (griffin morpher) in her, and Peluvaro (owl…[Read more]

@iluvhim18

Yeah tears are odd things…

Haha yeah i do the same, and I’m 17 lol,

well, thanks everybody! I have figured it out i think! 🙂

@iluvhim18

this is true about sadness; and a good reminder for not making writing too dramatic

And yeah it totally depends on the person! I have been starting to boycott making characters cry with sad things, usually I use things like them going tense, “eyes dulling”, “looking weary”, “jaw clenched”, etc… but I have those heartbroken scenes…[Read more]

@joy-caroline

yes, I have a timeline of close to thirty years in the series right now, with gaps of up to ten years between some of them.

@devastate-lasting

okay cool!!

so in my novel I have this people group called the Silyans; they are all beautiful maidens, and they are immortal… UNLESS they marry or bind themselves in friendship with a mortal, and then when that spouse or friend dies, they die with them, no matter where they are.

They also have power over gems and precious…[Read more]

@joy-caroline

Yes, they are, a good death scene is really satisfying, and in the case of my book, the hero and heroine’s deaths wrapped up the climax really well. I like a good death scene better than a romantic scene to be honest.

Yes I have… though I am thinking of making the last three and my WIP into a sequel series, because it’s central…[Read more]

@joy-caroline

thanks! my family loves their good food, so it comes up naturally I guess lol

and I’m glad you find my characters interesting even from brief description! I love them myself *chokes up that I ended up letting several die*

Yeah Viktur Oak is my favorite character in my WIP, even over Tyroll, who has a part in all previous nine…[Read more]

@lewilliams

Hello! oh yes you can ask, I don’t mind

The characters who would likely be crying now/soon:

A young man with PTSD and he’s about to enter a war in a place he has been before and hates it because of a really hard past being under the evil rule of a dark lord who trained him as an assassin.

A girl who’s the ‘be tough’ type, and is…[Read more]

@joy-caroline

Hello again!

haha thank you! it’s a line from my first fantasy novel that the beloved Tyroll Rouronon says. He’s my readers’ favorite character, (is it pride to say he’s mine as well? XD)

I like the signature you have as well, it’s a powerful one that makes one stop and think… at least it does me. and thank you for the tips!…[Read more]

@devastate-lasting

ok cool! thanks!

Hi! I have a fantasy WIP and I wanted some feedback on some of it if that’s okay…

Warning: I’m like how Gandalf described hobbits discussing family trees, when it comes to my world; “They can sit upon the edge of ruin and discuss family connections to the ninth degree…” something like that XD

What kind of Wip stuff can I post on this?…[Read more]

@lydia-s

Yeah my friends call me a tragedy writer but they also say the reason they like my writing is because some of the good guys die and not just the bad guys, so I stick to my plot mwahahaha I is evil

Ohhhhh thanks!!! I haven’t tried thesaurus before, not sure why, I’ll totally try that! thanks!

I also use sob/sobbing a lot XD and whimper,…[Read more]

@jenwriter17

Thank you so much! That was very helpful. 😀

@devastate-lasting

Thank you so much for the input! And, by the way, this is off-topic, but your profile picture is gorgeous!

@lewilliams

Thank you so much! I really appreciate the input. I still have two years till graduation, so I’ve got some time to think and pray, thankfully.…[Read more]

@joelle-stone

Well, I’m sure it’s awesome! 😉