Beth Torres

@whalekeeper

No girl, I love it! I think the key to writing chaotic scenes is pacing. Like if you have a lot of long sentences people are going to get confused, but in your case, you stuck to shorter/mid-length sentences and sprinkled in only a few long ones. It worked really well 👌

@the_lost-journal

What’s with the havoc potato thing?

@ellette-giselle

Lolol. I got worried for a second… but I’m assuming it’s the main character who I said was similar to Adrian because he died in book 1 and so did his best friend… I think.

(I was worried for Joseph. At this point I don’t know how surprised I would be if you killed him off too. xD)

@the_lost-journal

Excellent. I am a dapper potato. *sips tea*

Thank you, O great magic potato.

Now I just need one of those canes that are actually swords ahahaha.

Also.

@freed_and_redeemed

Aww, so sweet! 🥹

@whalekeeper

Love it!! I love your writing style so much actually! I’m not sure what it is, but something about it makes it easy and engaging to read 🤩

@freed_and_redeemed

Love the aesthetics!!! They look so good!! 🤩

@the_lost-journal

(I don’t know how close this is to you in real life, once again I did not choose it.)

The magic potato is actually magical at this point!

This is totally Andrew. Like, how is the random method actually picking out the correct potatoes?

@the_lost-journal

Magic potato, havoc potato, what potato am I?

@ellette-giselle

*ahem* What main character are you talking about? 🤨

@ellette-giselle

Yess! 😁 Gotcha. I remembered seeing him in it, but not much. (I still gotta finish that. Did you post the whole thing on there, even the ending?)

*putting all the pieces together lol* Yeah, I could tell 😢😢.

@ellette-giselle

OH!!! This is the Leon from the RP!!!!

@ellette-giselle

Yayyyy!!!! Julian!!! And more people!! 😆

It looks good! I liked the flashbacks into Joseph’s backstory. The only thing was I caught a sentence or two that didn’t flow well— “It was evening of the next day.” for example. Maybe you could change it to, “it was the next evening?” Idk. I’m sure it’s fine if you leave it.

@the-ducktator

I’ll be praying! 🙏

@the_lost-journal

Wait…

Wow, that was unexpected.

Cool!

Thank you

@the_lost-journal

Ok, sorry, I wasn’t meaning to butt in. I guess I just wanted to defend Ellette (not that she needed it, that’s just kind of how I am), but looking back I didn’t really need to intervene, and it probably just made you feel ganged up on. So I apologize for that.

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@ellette-giselle Oops, I didn’t see your post.

@the_lost-journal

It’s okay, no one is going to hate you. Ellette wasn’t being serious about really kicking you off KP, and like she said, it’s hard to tell online whether someone is joking or not. I understand that you have a lot going on, but I think you over reacted. If you are hurt by something that someone says, maybe try to clarify what…[Read more]