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@rae

Yeah, don’t worry if you don’t get to all of them! I know it can be a lot, lol.

@savannah_grace2009

I shall begin reading, but I can’t promise I’ll have tons of time to read all of it now. Thanks for the link!

P. S.

Don’t worry about the number of chapters, I myself have only gotten to about ten on my current draft!

@aranel

Sorry I’m late to the greeting party.

Call me Ru or Ruee. I’m a stubborn blue-eyed girl who has way too many characters, and story ideas swirling around in her head.

Questions…

1 what genre do you like to write?

2 how do you pronounce the word ‘pecans?’

3 do you like horses? If so, what’s your favorite gait?

4 what’s your WIP…[Read more]

@rae

Thanks! That’s so sweet <3

And I’ll go back to EDITING on the first part like you said. You have great feedback! Wanna read the whole thing, XD I’ll post the link! https://editor.reedsy.com/s/p8SdhuQ (if you don’t want to that’s totally fine!) Unfortunately, I don’t have any more chapters following this one, but if you want to critique the…[Read more]

@acancello

Aww, thanks girl!

@savannah_grace2009

I like that a lot better! It’s really up to you, though. Rae had some good feedback!

@savannah_grace2009 @esther-c @whoever (I never know who to tag.)

NAHIM

Everyone before had seemed to see him as some scary monster with that sword in his hand, and when he had tried to cut down the door it had gotten worse.

Now he had let his sword dangle limp from its usual place on his belt. He had set his helmet beside himself on the floor,…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I must be as blind as a bat!

Okay, I just read your revision of that last part and…I am never allowing you to change it. I have not had the same expierances as Sef, but I see myself in her. Sara, you’ve got this.

@savannah_grace2009

I get what you mean by clunky, I often feel like I have the same problem. Thses are the parts I think are the most in need of a little bit…

The air was pleasantly cold, nipping the tip of Sef’s nose as she walked in step with Lilitu. The sound of leaves crunching beneath their feet as they walked gave her a pleasant t…

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@trailblazer @hybridlore

Is this better?

“Last night, I had a dream…” Lilitu began. They stopped walking in a clearing. “I saw this girl…” he shook his head. “She was crying. She looked so sad, and hopeless…And it was so vivid. I could feel her pain, her suffering, and there was nothing I could do.” His voice was strained. Is he crying? Sef wonde…

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@thearcaneaxiom

BWAHAHA we know your name, now we can hack you! hehe

@trailblazer

Ofc! I love stories with that kind of friendship…makes me miss my best friend, lol.

@esther-c @acancello @trailblazer @grcr @rae @mineralizedwritings

Ottoline

“Ottoline! Where are you?” Hugo’s voice echoed down the stairwell. His voice contained some sort of urgency. “Ottoline!” She heard his footsteps coming down the stairs. “There you are,” he sighed when he saw her and smiled his crooked smile that never failed to make…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

👀

@trailblazer

“I don’t want to lose you.” I was surprised to see tears welling in Etta’s eyes.

Aww, I love their friendship! This almost made me cry XD

I agree with Hybridlore, I don’t think the summary-type writing is a bad thing. It fits great with this story!

@esther-c @trailblazer

Yeah, it does end abruptly. I really don’t like this chapter, lol. I guess….more EDITING! SO MUCH FUN!!!! (not.)

@hybridlore

Maybe something like that? I mean, Lilitu already described what happened, sort of, and I feel like it gets a little graphic in the actual flashback part. But it’s really up to you, if you feel l…

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@trailblazer

Yayy! Looks good! I don’t mind the summary kind of telling, I think it works well for this story.

@loopylin

Sorry about the paragraphs, I have gone through and shortened them after people mentioned it. it should be easier to follow now.

Um…really whatever strikes you as needs changing. I often get comments from my friends like “It’s good.” “I really like it.” et cetera et cetera. Honestly, I get tired of hearing that, so if you got some…[Read more]

@esther-c

That’s okay! Thank you!