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@abigail-m
Okay, thank you so much! I’ll try that next time <333

@kathleenramm

I’ll give it a go I suppose. I actually haven’t written anything for a while because we’re on vacation, but here’s my last sentence from a while ago.

He offered her a smile, not a grin like Connor’s, but something that he hoped would give her the encouragement she was searching for.

(Btw, how on earth do y’all do the green b…[Read more]

so I took the liberty of combining all the sentences into a scene. I found it funny, but then again I have a dry sense of humor;

I was relieved that it was a mime instead of a traditional clown, then I wouldn’t have to be caught up in some unfunny joke that he wanted to play on me. She would show everyone that she was more then just a puppet. “…

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@lydia-s

yeah, poor Daphne… alas, Klaiom’s true love must die. XD so sympathetic of me

yeah, well it’s all for the sake of the novel, they do not die in vain, at least XD

yes, you all were very helpful, thanks!

see you around! 🙂

@kathleenramm

okay, I gladly accept! Though it will make absolutely no sense! XD

“I was saving lives, Mythia, and I smacked her lightly with my reins, which I regretted, because she was jumpy for the entire next day!”

@kathleenramm

WOOHOOOO!!!! I accept the dare!! And oooh, you’re last line is SOO AWESOME!!!! I actually thought it was kinda cool with the meme and the traditional clown. XD

(Oh, also, @lydia-s your’s is sooooo intriguing and AWESOME, too!!!!!)

Okey-dokey, and here be mine!!!!!!

I won’t raise an alarm. I’ll do anything you ask. Just please giv…[Read more]

@gracie-j

I have absolutely no advice to give. This is completely my problem too, and I didn’t even realize I had it until I read this thread!! XD Thanks so much for starting it. I’ve learned a lot!

@gracie-j

Phew! I am reassured, thank you! I feel more confident about the other ones I’m planning to write lol

I will say that if that kind of proposal appeared in my work it means someone else was writing for me and I will be hunting them down XD

Thanks! yes, I need to work on emotions in scenes to be sure, thanks for the feedback!

@gracie-j

Hehehehe.. well, my friend, you’ve come to the right girl. XD 😉 okay, maybe not really.

Well, I’m just gonna start with answering your questions.

~Well, first off, that’s just really really REALLY hard for me, but it honestly takes me reminding myself over and over and over and OVER again that I’ll come back and edit later, I…[Read more]

@gracie-j

okay so I am trying to figure out a really good way for my male MC to propose to the girl he loves… I wrote the proposal a while ago

*backstory;  Faeda (main character) is an orphan living on an island under attack, and there is literally a war about to explode at any second, so she’s seeing the troop about to leave (she doesn’t…[Read more]

@lydia-s

yes, she’s amazing with writing, truly gifted!

Yah, I wrote that part about a year ago, and I just went back and read it while listening to ‘The Eagles’ from the Return of the King soundtrack, and made myself cry… “why, Daphne? why did I kill youuuuu?” XD

haha no you make total sense! It sounds epic!!! betrayal of a family… oof its…[Read more]

@lydia-s

Yeah, guys crying makes me emotional XD  I haven’t actually seen it in real life very often, but I didn’t think they were sissy for it.

Lol yessss a good scene with people crying adds sympathy to the hurting character, totally. Someone I know is writing an novel, and the MC’s best friend said, “Crying isn’t weak. Or at least… I hope…[Read more]

@anika123

So I also read your chapters you posted, and I find the plot very intriguing!! It’s well made as far as the actual story, I found it exciting and curiosity invoking!

for improving the sentence structure, I would say to add more motion to the characters, wide eyes can be used for surprise or fear, and raised eyebrow for skepticism, gasp…[Read more]

@nanisnook @keilah-h AHHH I totally forgot to send the list to you guys! I’ll do that soon! So sorry 🙁

@iluvhim18

oh ok cool

like i said i don’t know much about the story

glad to be of assistance!

@iluvhim18

what if she abdicates being queen? is she under 18? you could do where if they’re under 18 a lord protector can rule in the young monarch’s stead? This has happened in European countries with child monarchs…

idk if that is helpful or not…