AKBaer

@akbaer

hahaha whales can be pretty intimidating.

I love board games!  My little bro and me have a Memory rivalry (which isn’t rlly a board game).

ooo Gollum impersonation sounds like my sister!🤣🤣 that’s her favorite pastime.

archery sounds awesome!  I bet you’ll be amazing!  My BFF is super good at archery PLUS she is basically Jennifer…[Read more]

@joy-Caroline glad to help!! 🙂 these are honestly some of my favourite character tips lol  I love these kind of characters *inwardly cries at the pain I cause them *

@kathleenramm Yes Tolkien was an amazing author! My inspiration for writing style is partly from him but less ‘fancy wording’ if you get what I mean XD simpler English.

Aww yes Colin is such a good character for a positive character arc. His character lie is big, isn’t it? I suppose he’s very relatable; he may be a brat to begin with and a…[Read more]

@joy-caroline this is right up my alley, girl!  I LOVE parallel characters with different arcs!!!!!!! ❤  Keziah sounds AH-MAZE-ING!  I just *internally squeals* love her already.

Like @godlyfantasy12 said, I mentioned some things corresponding to this on her “Making my antagonist likeable/believable” topic.  To echo that, I’ll just cut and pas…[Read more]

@joy-caroline well I’d suggest giving moments showing her praying and asking God to help her with forgiveness, and showing her conflict with her anger and her want to obey God’s will of forgiveness. Show her earnest desire to follow God’s word I suppose; show the moments of love she gives others when she has the chance, but then her unsurity of…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12 ok sounds like a good plan! 🙂

btw it is fantasy and is not an allegory any more than Lord of the Rings is. I instead strongly incorporate lessons like loyalty, honesty, and forgiveness in my stories. It doesn’t have ‘magic’ as in wizards, and witches and such things if that gives you a better idea. Some of the evil people…[Read more]

@keilah-h ok!! *crack knuckles and sweats nervously XD

first beta reader down XD roseoakauthor at gmail dot com 🙂

@ariel-f it’s 61684

@goldyfantasy12 @keilah-h

It has no language or sexual content (that is something I’m very strict about). It’s adventures of a sister and brother and their journies growing up and crossing the lands. It doesn’t have gory violence, but there are many battles. It’s no more violent than the LoTR. I wrote it for teens.

There’s no strict deadline :)…[Read more]

@devastate-lasting okay all good.  let me know if you want to at some later point too, if not I totally understand

@will_starke Those shades are dope if anything is.

Hey @akbaer ! Sorry I’m late…  Welcome to KP!  I am Ella and I love writing dystopian fiction, drinking tea, playing sports, and drawing flowers.  And I have an irrational fear of falling into the murky river near our house. *cough* *smiles, wondering if we can still be besties* XD

Excuse me if these questions have already been asked, bu…[Read more]

@scoutfinch180

Like I said it’s first draft so there are repeated word choices like utter shock XD

@scoutfinch180

Kaunon has been into a lot of scrape and survived by the skin of his teeth, the scares are from fire battles and a nasty sand dragon that tried to eat him and when that didn’t work it tried to crush him 😂

here is the meeting of Alinnas parents

Gaol kept flying north, and after a few hours of steady flight, passed the m…

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@scoutfinch180

Kaunon has gotten into many scrape and mostly to save dear little Alinna and both of them get into trouble… they’re royals kids, they have little experience with real life outside their homes… the ones you n his face are from protecting Alinna and his friends from a nasty dragon/monster

and here is the first meeting of A…[Read more]

@scoutfinch108

Kaunon has gotten into many scrape and mostly to save dear little Alinna and both of them get into trouble… they’re royals kids, they have little experience with real life outside their homes… the ones you n his face are from protecting Alinna and his friends from a nasty dragon/monster

and here is the first meeting of A…[Read more]

@kathleenramm

Ohhh I love Secret Garden, it’s a lovely book! I should read it again! Who’s your favourite character? I love the robin redbreast.

Children of Hurin is worth the read when you have time! for most people i know who have said that it’s intimidating it’s usually the writing style; it’s like reading an old history textbook for fun.…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

This guy sounds fascinating!  His backstory is awesome, and he sounds like a genuine character.  For likeability, you could:

1)  Give the MC and Ridley something in common (a hobby, a genre of music, a favorite food, etc)

2)  like @elfwing said, moments of vulnerability.  That would make the reader open up to him really fast…[Read more]