Rosey Mucklestone

This idea. Is extremely awesome.

Okay, sorry. I couldn’t resist. XD

Ah, thank you. I now know I’m not the only one who has that sort of vague story-ending problem. 😛
Okay, ideas on fixing that. What happened to the time machine, anyway? You could use that again. Go through your story concept, find as many Chekov’s Guns as you can, and figure…[Read more]

Hey, Hannah! Great to have you here! 🙂
Well, looks like we’re even on the brother count, but you’ve got me beat on sisters. 😛

@hope it’s pretty good. Really allegorical/pilgrim’s progress sort of thing. Sir Faithful. The Castle of (fill in the positive attribute blank). In that, they’re outrightly having the different qualities be named and sought out things. Sounds like you’re having it a bit more subtle than that, though. 😛 You could still allude to it in the titles.…[Read more]

Thanks, @kate-flournoy! Thanks for replying, I’m glad you enjoyed it! 😀 I might have to use Holt again sometime. This is his only story as of yet. 😛

There was one book sort of going along that same concept I read called “The Quest for the Seven Castles”, except that one was going along traits mentioned in 2 Peter, I believe. Are you acknowledging within the story that the traits are connected, or is it more subtle?

Great story, Jada! It would definitely be a good start for something bigger if you wanted to. 🙂
Something I’d fix, you have her thoughts at the beginning in italics and quotation marks. I think only the italics are really needed here.
Enjoyed reading it!

I agree with Kate on the Joseph story. It’s the one that would be the most fun to write at least. And there’s actually an amazing redemption for Judah in that story. At the beginning, he’s so desperate for his father’s love, desperate to be the favorite, that he goes to the length of selling Joseph. But then the favoritism shifts to Benjamin. And…[Read more]

When I can, really. I’m not a beacon of scheduled perfection. But in NaNoWriMo I had an hour sometime in the morning and an hour sometime in the evening so I could break it up a little.

@ivy-rose Oh, snow?! Lucky… we pretty much either get clear and cold, or warm and wet. There is no in between. It’s like snow is impossible for this weather. 😛

You know you’re a writer when your little brother shows his appreciation for Back to the Future by chortling that “This is a good plotline!”

Really depends on his personality and the circumstances, I would think.
I mean, was the danger of this happening obvious before? Was he fearing this would happen? Or was this a total bolt out of the blue for him? And how was the message delivered? Gently, or someone unsympathetically bursting it on him?
I’m not sure if you do the MBTI for your…[Read more]

@ivy-rose Holy smokes, the different sides of the state really do make quite a difference in temps. We’re just hanging out around 30 degrees in the daytime right now and dipping down in the 10s at night. 😛

@blue-jay That would be just fine with me! It would probably help to see in the context of the full story. 🙂 If you think it’s too long, you…[Read more]

G’day, Tessa! Welcome to Kingdom Pen! 😀
Great story bit so far. 🙂 Let’s see… I had the same exact line as Kate’s first one pop into my head for that… so I’ll think of something else.
Maybe, “Life is full of dangers, but that doesn’t mean they shouldn’t be faced”? I think the main problem there is that you used to many words and the point is…[Read more]

Great job! 🙂 One correction I’d make in the opening verse to make it flow a little smoother:

For many years I’ve known;
We aren’t supposed to fear
I’d heard of “perfect love”
But never let it come so near

I’d add in a “that” in the second line so it’s “That we aren’t supposed to fear.” Just helps the rhythm to have that extra beat there. 🙂

Thanks, @hope and @jadamae! 🙂
Actually, my mom had that same theory about the neighbor being some bad guy agent trying to aid in the theft of the documents. It hadn’t occurred to me, but thinking about it, it actually works. So, feel free to think what you want on that topic. 😛

Oh, I like it. XD

Thanks! 😀 The conflict thing was fun to have. Usually, the humor is a distraction from a story tension and it was cool to write the other way. 🙂