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    Jada Morrison
    @jadamae
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      Hey guys,
      This a poem I wrote a couple weeks ago about an experience in my life. Enjoy, critique, and give me a good title!!!

      For many years I’ve known;
      We aren’t supposed to fear
      I’d heard of “perfect love”
      But never let it come so near

      Fear, as a matter of course;
      Was a decision-making force

      “How would it look?”
      “What would others think”
      Were important questions in my book

      Then, one day, I decided to see
      What “perfect love casts out fear” really means
      I looked up the verse, 1 John 4:18
      And a whole new world was opened to me

      Because of God’s love
      I don’t have to be afraid?
      That’s exactly what it said.
      Fear is pure torment
      Yes, I’d been there before
      But from to forever
      I’m not going there anymore

      Now I know I can be free
      After all these long years
      Never again, do I have to be
      Locked inside my fears

      #8222
      BlueJay
      @bluejay
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        Wow! I loved your poem. I am really bad at writing poetry, so I really admire those who can. As to titles- *rubs hands together*
        Perfect Love
        Breaking Free
        No Fear in Love
        Casting out Fear
        1 John 4:18
        Because of God’s Love
        Love verses Fear
        God is Love
        Well, that’s all I can think of off the top of my head. 🙂

        #8235
        Rosey Mucklestone
        @writefury
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          Great job! 🙂 One correction I’d make in the opening verse to make it flow a little smoother:

          For many years I’ve known;
          We aren’t supposed to fear
          I’d heard of “perfect love”
          But never let it come so near

          I’d add in a “that” in the second line so it’s “That we aren’t supposed to fear.” Just helps the rhythm to have that extra beat there. 🙂

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