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@grcr @freed_and_redeemed @theshadow @theducktator @esther-c @whalekeeper

yeah I’m keeping Crosshair here because he’s been in here for what, three years now and I greatly enjoy writing him. Feather’s out though, just because I wanna stick with one character for now and might save the slot for a charrie from another WIP or something.

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@ellette-giselle

 Don’t you find it a little funny that Aaron is the one to bring the kids back after being the strongest opposer of the idea?

There is an irony in that, which was why I thought the chapter was good. I read the last section you posted as well.

“Finnick is fifteen. In a few years he could find a place of his own,” offered Sabina…

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@whalekeeper

Oh please forgive me if it’s anything unkind that I said! If it truly is just a preference in writing then that’s okay. I just hope I didn’t offend you!

@whalekeeper

Is there a goal fulfilled within this first book? I’ve read and watched many series of media, and the ones that make the best impression have an end goal for the entire series and goals for each book/episode.

Yes, of course there is. I wouldn’t write a book without an end goal.

If you have studied story structure that deeply, you sho…

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@savannah_grace2009 @whalekeeper

Someone is having a hard time staying off until Christmas. lolololololol 😀

You might need to try outlining books based on a plot structure…like the Three Act Structure, because it hooks your readers more and you can kind of sense them pushing toward a goal.

Hmmm, well, I have to disagree. I will NEVER start a…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

HOW DO YOU DO THAT?!??!?!

Wow it’s like you can read my mind lol!

Anyways….

@ellette-giselle

I totally agree with what Whaley said.

The time jumps just take away so much from the story (even at the beginning where Aaron and Turin were working together) and it makes me lose interest. You do great at describing outside of the…[Read more]

@whalekeeper @loopylin @freed_and_redeemed @lightoverdarkness6 @anyone else

Guys do you want to read a really awkward scene

Btw I have had some social interaction almost this bad bc this is how my brain works XD I hope it pains you deeply

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Tauren meanders around the side of the dance floor, watching as Lesli takes her turn with somebody…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Just popping in because I’m bored, lol!

I kinda agree with Whaley. The story just doesn’t seem like it’s going towards a specific goal…like the events seem a bit random and idk how to describe it but it’s like your story’s missing something but it frustrates me because I don’t know what exactly I’m missing, just that something…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Because the orphanage plot was out of left field XD

Oh, well what did you expect to happen?

Don’t worry. The orphanage plays a key part in all three books.

@whalekeeper

I’ve already written the whole book. This is my fifth draft actually, and I was looking for reader reaction as well as some thoughts from y’all on structure and character since you are authors. Once I post everything on here, I’m passing this off to my editor.

why do you ask?

@whalekeeper

yes.

@keilah-h @theshadow @whalekeeper @linus-smallprint

New scene!

Asher and Eric were only the first of many war orphans who found shelter in the orphanage. On the second day of the two brother’s arrival, a girl came by saying her mother had felt led to give them some children’s clothing and she hoped Sabina could find someone who needed them. Aft…

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@keilah-h @theshadow @whalekeeper @linus-smallprint

new section!!!

The days passed, and the people of Ardenta waited in eager anticipation for the Sabbath. They longed to see each other, to hear from Aaron, and to be united in worship once again. At last, the week’s end came.

Early in the morning, before the sun or soldiers were up, the people w…

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@keilah-h @theshadow @whalekeeper @linus-smallprint

Ok, all y’all who have stuck with me through all of this, I have a question.

Is anyone willing to help me write a blurb? I keep trying and nothing sounds right? Anyone have ideas or examples?

Also, I’ll try to get another section tomorrow. I’m a little distracted with the publishing process of…[Read more]

@keilah-h @theshadow @whalekeeper @linus-smallprint

Ok, all y’all who have stuck with me through all of this, I have a question.

Is anyone willing to help me write a blurb? I keep trying and nothing sounds write? Anyone have ideas or examples?

Also, I’ll try to get another section tomorrow. I’m a little distracted with the publishing process of…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Your utter regard for my antiphilbibliophilation and philbibliophobia is indeed. . . touching. . . Or at least, I’m definitely touched in the head! (But you likely already knew that. 😜)

My sagely sageful advise and device:

• Turn it into a badly done fractured fairytale of Romeo and Juliet by killing off the bad guy and the good…

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@whalekeeper @loopylin

I’ve made it a point in the past year or so to make eye contact when I’m listening to someone, but sometimes I start thinking of ways I’d describe their eyes in a book and stop paying attention to what they’re actually saying. 🫣😂

@keilah-h That’s a perfect name! I named mine Cyrus.

@whalekeeper

I’ve always struggled with drawing a cartoon version of myself but now I have to XD

I would love to see that if you do end up drawing it :]

@mineralizedwritings

Aw, thanks so much!

And you’re so good at drawing toes. They are the bane of my existence.

XD Probably because I’ve bee…[Read more]

@whalekeeper I watched legend of hei and I really loved it. I love the whole parent child dynamic it was so cute. I think they should make it into a series. Also the fluid animation made me happy. It reminded me of the first season of Wakfu a lot.