Enid

@koshka

Rory

“Bolts and screws, bolts and screws.” Rory muttered slowly. For the amount of things they taught in Academy, there was very little about normal life. Mostly about killing and the most effective ways to do it. Rory racked his brain. The two words were familiar, but he couldn’t remember having encountered the things they repre…[Read more]

@rae

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I can not believe he just said that to Dante

@rae

I would say it was fulfilled rather than changed. The Bible says not a dot not an iota will go away and nothing will change. (Murdering the wording, but that’s the raw meaning)

Otherwise yeah! Looking forward to the next part.

@loopylin np

Alpha

Alpha blinked. “No, not exactly. I’m a warrior, so I fight wherever in the stars they want me this time. Only time I ever thought of assassination was with some of those annoying lords in the Council, but if I did that, they’d probably lock me up again. And that’s no fun. I think they like sticking me with needles.” A shudder…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I will need to clear this up in the story i guess. I didn’t mean all the laws, I meant more the changes in that we no longer have to sacrifice animals because Jesus came as the ultimate sacrifice. The laws changed in little ways because Hope had finally come, we didn’t have to wait for it.

I will make this clearer in the text,…[Read more]

@loopylin

Oops. Poor Eddie. At least this kid does actually like to dance.

@whalekeeper

Yay!

(I’m assuming that’s good news, right? No surgery is usually good I think)

@rae sorry it’s short

Dante

“So you’re an assassin.”

@koshka @raxforge

Eddie

Ed blinked a couple times, surprised that her question could be misinterpreted twice in the exact same way by two different people. Were all the boys in the school this clueless?

She opened her mouth to respond, closed it, then looked helplessly at the other two boys.

@theducktator Yay! Im glad you’re feeling better. A lot of my friends and family have been sick lately as well. I’ve been pretty lucky that I haven’t gotten anything yet. Tis the season, I guess.

Liko

“Cookies?” Liko raised his eyebrows. “Who doesn’t?”

He paused, trying to remember what he was forgetting. His thoughts had drifted off to…[Read more]

@loopylin @raxforge

Sprite kid don’t get it. XD

Sypher

He followed the lasses in, settling into the seat be across from them.

“Eddie. Ellie. Ah.” He blinked at her in concentration. Grinned. “I am named Sypher, but everyone who doesn’t call me that, calls me Syph. As for dancing, or rather…I don’t believe I understand. What days are open”

@whalekeeper

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Reading my older RPs kind of pains me. My sister came to my desk and found me clutching my head. XD

Whaat?? I’ve been having so much fun rereading your old stuff. It makes me so cheerful. 🩵 I was keeping myself motivated earlier by looking forward to when Marcel was introduced.

I may be in the same boat as you though when I get to…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Leo

He grinned. “First off you’re going to sit on that couch in the basement break room and sort a bucket of bolts and screws that I accidentally dumped together last week. Or maybe that was two weeks ago.” He paused to blink up at the ceiling for a moment, then refocused on Rory. “Anyway, you’ll do that while I check the work…[Read more]

@rae

this was another good section. I feel like you’re really sinking into a good style and voice with this. I had a slight problem with one sentence though.

When Immanuel came, the laws God previously had placed changed.

I don’t see that in the Bible. If anything, the laws were reinforced more strongly. (You have heard it said do not commit adu…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Who is James? (I think I want him to be someone who is laid back and jokes around a lot, but occasionally has a moment where he shows surprising wisdom.

oh. That’s not at all how I pictured him.

idk if this is a good idea, but I pictured him as quieter and much more thoughtful. Someone who is constantly watching and l…[Read more]

@esther-c

It looks a lot better! One thing I noticed is that Antonio does say “fabuloso” twice.

“Then the topic conveniently comes up in a conversation with Easton.”

Also, I feel like this might be better if you just change it to “Then I can ask Easton” or something like that. Otherwise, it looks great! I like the way you made Hallie more rea…[Read more]

@freed_and_redeemed

girl I need you to write that book!!!

MUST. HAVE. MORE. FANTASY.

🤭🤭🤭

@esther-c

girllll

i love thissss

Keep writing ✨✨

*pops head in*

I’m so happy to see this forum still active and well🥹🥲

@kielah-h @ellette-giselle @raxforge @whalekeeper @hybridlore

This is the final part of Story 9.

In my writing document, I named this story temporarily as ‘Delirium’ but I would like some better title ideas if you can give me some. Thx in advance.

Five days had passed since Baron had been taken to the Handel mansion and his symptoms…[Read more]