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@savannah_grace2009

This is sooo good! Your writing is so beautiful.

I never show my parents anything other than funny short stories. I don’t think they’d dislike it or not approve…but having parents read my cringey emotional or romantic scenes…*shudders*

@linus-smallprint

Oh, definitely. I was just curious about the rights of Canada’s government compared to ours. They seem to be very close.

@savannah_grace2009

Awww! Esther!!! That means literally so so SO much to me!!

I appreciate you so much, you’re amazing 🥺🥺💜💜💜💜

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So for a while I stopped writing altogether, because even when I would try to write happy things that didn’t include violence or too much evil or darkness, somehow the topic would always shift. And my heart was…

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I want to use was and were less. I’ve noticed this mostly in my essays. I’ll write sentences like he was, or this was, and in my last essay I eliminated a lot of those, and it sounded a lot better.

I want to get better at worldbuilding. That’s something that always gets neglected in my stories. I generally just make stuff up as I go along, but…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Ha!

That’s kind of funny, but Julian would KILL anyone who did that to him.

Plus it seems a little cliched.

BUT, it was funny. XD

@linus-smallprint

Got it.

@linus-smallprint

Okay, I’ll fix that. He was supposed to be joking. If he was joking would it work?

Sorry. Sometimes, I shy away from commitment and speak with uncertainty (that’s one of the ways my character, Eric, is like me). Maybe waiting until they are published would be a good idea, but yes, I will let you use them as a r…

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@linus-smallprint

Yeah… 😅

That’s really interesting. Crazy to realize that this really isn’t too far off from what is happening in real life today.

In Canada, do you have the same guaranteed rights as in the US’s Constitution? I’m assuming it’s very similar. Freedom of assembly, freedom of speech, freedom of religion, etc.?

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@linus-smallprint

I thought he might want to turn back and no longer continue with them at this point, seeing this as a sign to return to his village and be with Liesle (if I spelled that right). But he seems determined to keep going for the moment.

Yeah, Roland’s pretty stubborn.

Julian is sounding a bit like a mother here. (I’m not sure i…

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@linus-smallprint

I thought so.

A lot happened in that last section that I was hoping on feedback for, so it was surprising when you didn’t say anything. XD

@liberty

Would you be okay with me moving on? I don’t need you to give instant feedback if you’re unable to keep up.

If you really need me to wait a day though then I can.

@linus-smallprint

Hmm, okay. Well that’s odd.

Okay, so you have reached the point where Roland is injured.

No thoughts on the assassination attempt?

idk what I ended up saying.

Okay…. let me go look.

Thanks for the feedback! I’m glad the characters are becoming more alive! Hybridlore would disagree with you on not having all of…[Read more]

@grcr

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@grcr

Hello again! I was just a little worried that I didn’t give enough details… So if you need anymore details about pretzel just tell me! ＼＼(۶•̀ᴗ•́)۶ //／／

ugh, I am so bored.

Esther, I also think it’s so cool how you write about small everyday struggles. It’s hard to find beauty in the mundane, when it seems the same day after day.

But in your writing, you can make even the everyday struggles, the repeating tasks beautiful, and everything you write has a message, and I think it’s so cool!!!! And I know God will use you <33

@esther-c

Awww! Esther!!! That means literally so so SO much to me!!

I appreciate you so much, you’re amazing 🥺🥺💜💜💜💜

I never really thought about it that way!! But that makes a lot of sense!!

Honestly I’ve struggled a lot with the way that I just go to the hard things that need to be talked about…people like my parents have said that my…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

OH MY GOODNESS!!!

That’s amazing!!! That’s so cool!!!! Wow! I LOVE how you draw scenes like that!

YOU MUST keep that in the book if you publish with illustrations.