Enid

@theshadow

It looks good! I don’t have any major critiques. It is a very short chapter, but it does a good job of building on the tension. Also, I like the way you described the trees.

It seems a little weird that Olivia and Adeline and Dylan don’t seem to care about their families… well, maybe Dylan a little bit.

@freed_and_redeemed

Love it!!

Also was not expecting Erich! I need to know how he joined the American army!!!

@hybridlore  @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @liberty

NEXT SECTION!!!

Interesting POV switch. A new technique I tried out for telling long stories rather then having a ton of first-person dialogue. Let me know what y’all think.

The sixteenth year of Emperor Haidronias’s reign
September 9th
The Empire<…

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@theshadow

Oooo!! I like this!! This is getting good!

And, what if, what if we don’t make it?

This is a little cluncky because of the punctuation. If you did: “And what if–– what if we don’t make it?” or “And what if. . . what if we don’t make it?” either of those would work well. Use the dash if you want it to read as a sudden horrif…[Read more]

@keilah-h

@hybridlore

Thanks you two.

As for online, I don’t trust it. I’ve heard and seen too many online things get hacked for my liking. 😅

Thanks for the suggestion though!

@keilah-h

*Grins and steeples fingers together*

Ah, a KaPeefer finally asked this most interesting of questions…

XD

Short story: “Fork the Gork!” Is a rally cry from one of my sister’s books (her Beliriegn children’s story, if she ever talks about it on here). Certain characters tend to use it with conjunction with their own battle cry “Fork…[Read more]

@esther-c I like that idea.

We could also do Discord. It’s really great for organizing and customizing things. We could have different channels that are like the different topics, and we could even set up something similar to the Bumbling Henchman/ Chosen One/ ect. titles

Or if we can’t do Slack find another free platform where we can have separate channels/forums to keep everything organized

I’m half-tempted just to create our own Slack community at this point. Since (i think) we all trust each other. And then only people we know can get in (no more stalkers XP).

Because if KP was just abandoned, then we’ve got our own little writing community that will live on

Idk 🤷🏻‍♀️ Just an idea…

@keilah-h

Perhaps not, but it would be interesting to see what people noticed it.

@grcr

About his eyes on fire, is it more of just his irises or is it the whole thing?

Whole eye on fire pls

And what colors do you want his clothes to be?

I don’t really know to be honest. Whatever normal raggy clothes have in color. (sry that’s not really helpful)

@keilah-h

That one.

@keilah-h

The one that hit Florida. Milton, I think.

Thanks!

@beth-torres

Ryla

The look on the face of the other boy told Ryla that this was not an isolated incident. Suddenly the boy on the floor grabbed his hat and leapt to his feet. Startled, Ryla fell into the wall.

The boy pointed at her. “Do you eat strawberry leaves?”

Ryla hugged her bag closer. “No?” Was that wrong? What was a strawberry? “Who are you?”

@koshka

Thank you! I tried the Get in Touch page a week or two ago, but I haven’t heard back.

@theducktator

XD

Oh gracious. That’s quite a parody.

It is concerning though. I wonder if there’s any other way to contact her.

@beth-torres

Thank you. *bows* The concerning thing is that Kathleen’s last appearance lines up with the hurricanes…

@the_lost-journal

That’s an awfully short reply for my epic Veggietales parody.😒😂 But yeah, I have no idea. I’m hoping this post gets their attention.

@ellette-giselle

Ohhhhh nooooooo! Ellette! I’m so sorry! That’s terrible!

I’m glad LOS was okay… but I’m really sorry about your WIP. That’s terrible.

I use Word Online (microsoft365.com, I think…) to write, and it saves online so I can access it through my phone and other devices. That might be worth looking into for the future, since I’m pre…[Read more]

Soon, Great Pastabilities will be opening for business! It is a vegan, gluten free, cruelty free Pasta brand which will produce macaroni and cheese without products which could potentially harm anyone or anything!

The Grand Opening will be at 9:00 am March 18th 2025 in the Mall on Main Street, where we’ve found a location where Cinnabon used to…[Read more]