whaley the great and terrible

@ellette-giselle

Okay, so you’re going for a more ambiguous setting with more brainwashing? I do love The Giver and Fahrenheit 451, I like the genre.

I feel like most of what you just said doesn’t really have much to do with the story………

…Well I said this:

 Because it doesn’t make much sense from the perspective of a government to deny heterosex…

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@ellette-giselle

Okay great 😊 (If anyone is sensitive please skip reading.)

This is just a big brainstorm post, maybe it will be helpful.

Why would everyone give up as a group on heterosexuality? American culture overwhelmingly enjoys any depiction of male-female pleasure, it is an integral part of our culture. (It’s disgusting, but here we a…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

So I like the idea of a marriage themed dystopia, but I do have some questions because some of this doesn’t make sense and could be cleared up. Can I ask a few things?

@keilah-h

Cool, I listened to it while writing.

I’m still tinkering away at this! but casually. And I actually have to write future scenes before posting the next bit because of all the plot threads, deaths, etc etc etc.

Actually I haven’t seen any story use objectification as the protagonist’s flaw, that would be kind of cool. Lots of rough growth, but cool.

@ellette-giselle

Ohh *sneaks in* this is the marriage story right? If you post a section where the characters explain why marriage is banned versus discouraged, I’d like to read it. I liked the first scene you shared too.

Also I had to meme-ify this 😅

But no one’s perfect at the beginning of a book, it’s a good story idea to see someone grow…[Read more]

Okay cool

I just realized several people owe Marcel or want to say sorry for something. I tried to even it out with the demon fight, but I don’t think this is ever going to stop unless he stops doing things for other people. 😂

@loopylin

Hehehehe, repressed romantic emotions.

@rae @theshadow

Okay Shadow, I’m not going to move after this until you’re good to go. 🙂

Barnes

“Good,” she replied to Tenz.

Hugo began to stir. He stretched, and sat up, casually tracing the hearth with the tip of his foot. He reminded Barnes of a stray cat who used to haunt her front porch – grateful for the warmth, but undeniably exploiting…[Read more]

@rae

Good choice.

@theshadow

Awesome, thank you! *Sees the cookie box is already empty* *Refills it with caramel popcorn*

It’s difficult to make this scene clear, because it is confusing from the character’s perspective. He is supposed to not know why this is happening. So… yeah. XD

@koshka @ellette-giselle and maybe? @raxforge

I’m confused, are we still in the basement or is something happening?

@loopylin @rae @freed_and_redeemed

Awesome, thank you all <3

Barnes “disappeared” but she’s actually close by, getting something to cheer him up. Probably a bag of baseballs.

For someone that hasn’t been through that, I will be honest in saying that it took me a moment or two to kinda figure out what was going on

Good to know. Since I was just w…[Read more]

oh right, tags.

@mineralizedwritings @loopylin @freed_and_redeemed @rae @honestlyidontknowwhowantstoseethis

@theshadow

Looks like Percival has pride issues XD

@rae

Barnes

Reid used Rowan’s cloak to prop up the sleeping boy’s head. The group then ate in silence, the sizzle of meat singing to keep them company.

“…Now we can turn to conversation,” Barnes remarked.

Just don’t expect me to start it.

She took her own bowl of food and set it to the…[Read more]

@rae @theshadow (shadow, you can tell us to wait for you whenever you want :P)

Barnes

That was all Barnes needed. “Sit down now, or return in fifteen minutes.”

Two of the men – Percival and Rowen – still eyed each other like feral dogs. They sat without removing their blades from their waists. Reid slowly shifted his tendrils to the forefront,…[Read more]