TheShadow

@mineralizedwritings @loopylin @freed_and_redeemed @rae @theshadow @esther-c @keilah-h @raxforge @whalekeeper @koshka @grcr

I decided to drop a scene from one of my books. Just wanted to see what y’all thought about it.

 
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It was dark, and Jonathan couldn’t see. He was lying on something hard, and he could sense the space was cramped. Above h…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle @stephie @keilah-h @theducktator @loopylin @theshadow

Here we go!

Chapter the 21st – The Arrest

ok… tagging

@theshadow

(it didn’t work before)

@rae @theshadow

Okay Shadow, I’m not going to move after this until you’re good to go. 🙂

Barnes

“Good,” she replied to Tenz.

Hugo began to stir. He stretched, and sat up, casually tracing the hearth with the tip of his foot. He reminded Barnes of a stray cat who used to haunt her front porch – grateful for the warmth, but undeniably exploiting…[Read more]

@rae

Good choice.

@theshadow

Awesome, thank you! *Sees the cookie box is already empty* *Refills it with caramel popcorn*

It’s difficult to make this scene clear, because it is confusing from the character’s perspective. He is supposed to not know why this is happening. So… yeah. XD

@theshadow got some hybrid info for you!

• Hybrids of human/anything else usually look like whatever species the non-human parent was, but often with something small missing. Or, conversely, they can be like humans with a few subtle clues of their other parent’s species. Example: Huntress and Scout. Huntress is effectively a full Changeling, but…

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@theshadow All righty, I’ll be sure to do that!

@freed_and_redeemed wowwww I’m loving this story! My only issue: I get you’re trying to do a pseudo-Old English speech pattern, so it’s not accurate by any means, but when you say “It ’twas” the T in ’twas already stands for “it” so it’s kinda redundant.

Not anything that diminishes the quality of…[Read more]

@raxforge

You had a good idea with the tagging, ill do the same!

HERE I GO!

@beth-torres @hybridlore @theshadow @grcr @rae and anyone else!

@theshadow @whalekeeper

Tenz & Reid

“…Now we can turn to conversation.”

Tenz looked up at her. “You’re a good cook! Omi never could cook like you!” Tenz smiled at Barnes, his legs swinging under the table. His shoes scraped against the stone.

Reid glanced worriedly back at the sleeping form by the fire.

…I have actually never had a smore so…I am learning with the charries XD

@theshadow @kielah-h @theducktator @princesachronicle22 @kyronthearcanin

Callyn

Evelyn slid a marshmallow on Callum’s stick for him, perfectly centering it. “It should cook evenly that way, right?”

Callum shrugged. “This…squishy white-thingy whatever it…[Read more]

@theshadow

Thanks, I’ve come back from the depths of despair (aka homework).

I know that feeling! (lol)

@theshadow

Looks like Percival has pride issues XD

@rae

Barnes

Reid used Rowan’s cloak to prop up the sleeping boy’s head. The group then ate in silence, the sizzle of meat singing to keep them company.

“…Now we can turn to conversation,” Barnes remarked.

Just don’t expect me to start it.

She took her own bowl of food and set it to the…[Read more]

@keilah-h @theshadow @rae @kyronthearcanin @princesachronicle22

Joy

“Y’know, when I talk about eatin’ beetle grubs, they don’t feel and taste all that different from this. Just a lot less sugar,” remarked Sniper.  Huntress whacked him. “Stop that. They’re gonna think you’re crazy.”

Joy nudged Stephen and gestured towards the two with her mar…[Read more]

@whalekeeper @theshadow

Tenz & Reid

Reid thanked Barnes, before drawing the capsule that held Tenz closer to him. He lifted the cover, gently patting Tenz’s shoulder with his hand to wake him.

Tenz opened his eyes slowly, fluttering them a bit before moaning at Reid.

“Ms. Barnes made food, are you hungry?” Reid asked.

“I’m hungry.” He quietly…[Read more]

@theshadow lol everyone else is like “whaaaat noooo we aren’t a couple” and meanwhile Huntress and Sniper are like “ehh, we already admitted we’re in love with each other, it’s the concept of getting together permanently that unnerves us”

@rae @theshadow (shadow, you can tell us to wait for you whenever you want :P)

Barnes

That was all Barnes needed. “Sit down now, or return in fifteen minutes.”

Two of the men – Percival and Rowen – still eyed each other like feral dogs. They sat without removing their blades from their waists. Reid slowly shifted his tendrils to the forefront,…[Read more]

@whalekeeper @theshadow

Reid

“Yes, that may be wise. Especially if we plan to explore more of this place soon. Since Hugo briefly awoke already, I’m guessing he’ll wake up soon. And Tenz…he’ll get up when he smells food.” Reid reached out with one of his tendrils, drawing an apple to him. “Though I must say this place has strange and interesting food.”

@ellette-giselle @stephie @keilah-h @theducktator @loopylin @theshadow

Next chapter! We are about two-thirds through The Cost now. (Maybe a little under.) This scene was not in the first draft, so I’m interested to see what you think of it.

Chapter the 20th – The Eraser

@theshadow lol I’m glad you’ve enjoyed it!

No, I think it’s fine, I like how you tell your story.

yay!

I like this one the best lol, that would be such a fun story to tell.

Haha, yeah it would be hilariously funny, and it means I get to design Changeling/Argonite hybrids, which I bet would be super cool.

Honestly I have so many ideas for h…[Read more]

@rae @theshadow

Barnes

“It’s a sport.” Barnes held up a fist, and hit it against the palm of her other hand. “Like that.”

They halted at a hall junction. Following a smaller corridor, they passed golden lanterns, the light of which seemed to melt through the cracks of the stone walls like melted butter.

The corridor opened to a chamber. A…[Read more]