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@thearcaneaxiom

Makes sense. Though that leaves me with some questions about the first chapter still. Why give Jordan and his wife such a beginning? Despite making it obvious that they are evil, you’ve humanized them by giving them a dying child, and having them feel grief. Also, why did you project Kratos in a negative light almost directly, w…

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@trailblazer

hopefully Kari and Ottoline will be friends! They have some things in common!

@hybridlore

Sure since that’s what it sounds like everyone wants.  This is gonna be fun!

@grcr I love british accents!!!

@hybridlore

Sure since that’s what it sounds like everyone wants.  This is gonna be fun!

@grcr I love british accents!!!

Yeah I still can’t and I’ve tried every day 🙁

@jonas

That’s okay! 🙂

@esther-c @grcr @acancello @mineralizedwritings @hybridlore

Ottoline is very excited to join the party!

She’s about 5’1 with mid length strawberry blonde hair. She was kidnapped by Pythonos as a baby and experimented on until she escaped at thirteen. So she’s very shy and has a little PTSD from being abused.

She normally wears browns, grays,…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

@princesachronicle22 and he looks great too XD his story is so SADDDDD. poor boi 😭

Thanks! And yesss, I feel so bad to hurt him so😭

@lightoverdarkness6

XD XD

Hahaha! Poor Tyler the poor adorable boy 😂❤️

@grcr I don’t know what kind of party it is, haha! You guys can decide, but I have some ideas.

A birthday party? (I wasn’t sure on this one, because we’d have to decide who’s birthday it is)

A costume party?

A fall harvest party?

A super bowl party?

These are just random thoughts, so if you have more, please post! Thank you!

I hope Chero is now entertained lol

@euodia-vision @whalekeeper @calyhuge

Felicity 

“Filthy children! Get out of here! Thieves!” A scratchy high pitched voice cried out.

“Is that pudding?!? I just cleaned that! Achk! Chip dust! Out, foul speck! Get out, get out!!”

An old woman with leathery skin and hair as white as Felicity’s advanced on them from across the room. She brandish…[Read more]

@kydonandwillow

I love it! I have the same thoughts as Cloaked Mystery. Also it might help if you spread out the chapter a little more. The events seem to happen really fast, and the reader barely has time to process before the next event happens. Sorry if that doesn’t make sense, I’m not good at explaining what I mean, haha!  Maybe go more into…[Read more]

@jonas

i like your idea for your universe and books on each of the planets. I had an idea for that once, but it kind of fell apart. Good luck with yours!

@whalekeeper

You’re right, I think it all comes down to personal opinion and morals and your own personal boundaries. If someone wants to write about magic, I would say go for it, as long as they’re careful. And I agree that it is very controversial. I’ve just chosen not to put “good” magic in my story, because that’s just what I believe and what…[Read more]

@trailblazer

oh yeah I remember reading that, I just didn’t put two and two together haha! Like you said, I just took it as that’s how long she lived there, not how old she was.

@trailblazer

It’s really good! I like it! One question:How old is Libbie? Or does it say, sorry if I missed it, I kind of skimmed it.

@whalekeeper

I love the name Lilitu as well! Another one of my favorites in my story is Sef, and I absolutely love Ottoline’s name!!! And Marcurious. I guess I might be a little biased, haha!

But thank you! I’ll pass on the message to Lilitu…haha! Right now he and Sef are running through the woods to evade the Pythonos. He’s a little busy, but…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

I want my allegories to be recognizeable for Christians, and its okay if others see it too, but it’s not going to follow the Bible exactly, and hidden to some extent. So it’s totally fine if lots of people recognize them! I guess it doesn’t matter, however I want to make the Bible/Bible stories interesting and exciting for those who…[Read more]