TheLobsterLover

@thelobsterlover

Hmm, well, those activity things didn’t worked for me, so I tagged you here. (Sharing images on here is troublesome for me too)

Ooo, I can’t wait to see it!

Here’s a link to my email;If this works.

Your story idea sounds great! I have one question before I begin making suggestions: what would be the “powers” the siblings have? Do they turn into those creatures? How does that work?

Tagging some more people….

@trahia-the-minstrel @elanor @writerlexi1216 @kathleenramm @abigail-m @faith-q @not-so-secret-secret-assassin @nova21 @ariel-f @nanisnook @scripter-of-kingdoms @lewilliams @ribbonash @imwritehere1920 @beth-darlene @lydia-s @buildsbygideon @relia @iluvhim18 @jodi-maile @daisy-torres @godlyfantasy12 @jenwriter17 @lucy @m…[Read more]

@devastate-lasting For number 3, just put both.

@godlyfantasy12

What I meant by “lost over an entire line” is that in stanza 1 you have 11 lines, in stanza 2 you have 12 lines, and in stanza 3 you have 11 lines, but in stanza 4 you only have 9-10 lines (It appears that I may have made a mistake on line 41. It might need to be split between “here” and “since”.) If you look at the syllable count…[Read more]

And please acquit me for being impulsively apologistic. 😳😋

And please forgive the terrible grammar. 🙄 I’m rereading through my post and . . . 😬

Here’s the poem in stanzaic form.

(Line number)

1   O’ Ring the bell! Call out the clowns! 8 (Syllables in Line/Beats) A (Rhyme Scheme)

Tis time to fly on wings of doubt, 8 A

And float upon the breeze of bliss, 8 B

forgetting all the things you’ll miss. 8 B

5   Don’t fear the things that lie ahead, 8 C

the dangers, darkness, fear and…[Read more]

@annabelle @elishavet-pidyon

I suppose Natalia is sort of that entire known world, but for some reason it seemed to me more like a kingdom in a wild, unknown land.

I wonder if there’s a thing on here for Antagonist development. Or maybe we should start a new one.

Uniqueness… That may turn out to be a struggle, especially as I’m not entirely…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Ooo, I like that last bit.

I can’t exactly see the rhyme and meter as the stanzas are written together in paragraph form, but what I could I enjoyed. Would you mind reposting it in verses (If it was written as such)?

@trahia-the-minstrel That’s cool!

@godlyfantasy12 Great job! It sounds ominous, is it meant to be?

@trahia-the-minstrel

Yay! That’s great! Your website looks so pretty. You did a great job designing it!

@keilah-h

Bonifer is worse than everybody. He’s like… the worst villain. EVER. That I’ve read about at least. There could be more evil or dark villains out there… but Bonifer is just so well-written for a villain. Andrew Peterson did a great job creating him.

@elishavet-pidyon

Ambition, bitterness, and pride… Those are pretty good traits…[Read more]

@elishavet-pidyon @annabelle @koshka Ugh, Bonifer Squoon. He’s almost worse than the other villain I hate….Wait, scratch that. He is worse.

Garten Longtreader….Well, I wasn’t so mad about him. But he is a horrible character.

@koshka

Good point. I mean, Natalia is pretty much the whole world in the Green Ember, so Garten kind of did ruin the world… but Bonifer kidnapped a baby and lied to the baby’s mother. So that’s pretty bad.

Antagonists… They can be so difficult. We don’t want them to just seem like the same old bad guy from cartoons or whatever. They have to…[Read more]

@annabelle

*Grimaces*

Bonnifer certainly did more damage. Hmm, maybe that should be taken as a warning; Garten betrayed his king and broke a kingdom, Bonnifer twisted a child and shattered a world.

*Sigh* My antagonists are either vague or already dead. They need work, but as I’m not sure who several of them are…

@koshka

Ugh, Fangs. They’re disgusting.

Bonifer is worse than Garten, in my opinion at least! Garten was pretty bad though… I agree, Bonifer is well written. I need to use some techniques Andrew Peterson used for him on my villains. My antagonist always seems kind of dry.