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@ellette-giselle

Yeah, I literally felt a tear at the goodbye scene. And I don’t usually cry reading things (at least, not fiction).

Can’t wait for the next chapters…!!

It would. I don’t know. I’d have to ponder for a while. no promises. I’ve already got me hands full atm… but the temptation is great.

@grcr It would be such a cool comic!

@ellette-giselle

Ohhh, gotcha.

I don’t know, let me check.

@loopylin

*Bounces up and down because I just researched this* Make full summary of the mystery solution and the story behind it. Something like, “the old lady killed the doctor. She raised alligators in her home because she was a reptile researcher. She trained the alligators to do this, and this, and this. Her plan played out like this. She did…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I was going to, but it wouldn’t let me sign in with my alt account and I didn’t want my main on there for all to see.

I don’t think I’ve heard of Equilibrium—is that a movie or a book?

@whalekeeper

Which plot twist? The one about Jonas’s dad?

@ellette-giselle

It’s so sad… I love 314 so much.

Also. random thought. this would make such a great manga/comic.

(Agh.. no, I’m not about to cry. totally not. not at all.)

@hybridlore

also, have you read the Giver? This book reminds me a lot of that so far.

Dystopian classic. *Sighs emphatically* I remember reading one of the plot twists as a nervous little thirteen-year-old and freaking out. Really good book.

@ellette-giselle

It was right around when Sara burst out at Jonathan.

I don’t know… I like Don. 😅 And Jonathan.

also, have you read the Giver? This book reminds me a lot of that so far.

@ellette-giselle

It worked!

I liked these chapters. You did a great job of increasing the tension. I did notice that you briefly switched into Sara’s POV during the first chapter, then went back to Jonathan. I would fix that.

Great job!

@godlyfantasy12

Godlyyyy

You’re here, madam ghost. I see you on the Currently Active bar.

@ellette-giselle

They’re not showing up on the link for me.

@ellette-giselle @stephie @whalekeeper @keilah-h @theducktator

Chapter the 34th out!

@liberty

Gotcha.

@keilah-h

Fr. I don’t want characters to agree with me all the time, because then there would be nothing to think about.

@whalekeeper

Life be like that sometimes.

lol

@whalekeeper

Isaiah’s “code” doesn’t bother me. I mean, it would bother me in real life.

ehhh that’s characters in morally compromised settings for ya though.

Even your absolute favorite will most likely always, always say something that you don’t quite agree with if their plot has to do with them dealing with, or being, questionable people.

@whalekeeper

I like it! Isaiah and Cedrick are more interesting together than apart.

Glad to hear they are a good combo. Sometime what make a good character isn’t so much who he is, but who he’s with.

As for the world, your inspiration photos are close to what I pictured while I read. There was this sense of dry coldness in the described…

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@ellette-giselle

Wait what? You mean you don’t use spell check for the other book and still manage to have something readable?!

I didn’t know other writers couldn’t spell until I joined KP. XD I’ve rarely needed spell check. But my handwriting is horrible, and people can’t read it, so the skills balance out.

@ellette-giselle

*laughing very hard* *stops* Wait what? You mean you don’t use spell check for the other book and still manage to have something readable?!

If I did that…… *shudders*

Lucky boy. I can’t believe your brain lets you do that.

Um… yes. I’m following the rule of first drafts to ignore grammar and turn off spell check. I guess I…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

I like it! Isaiah and Cedrick are more interesting together than apart. Isaiah’s “code” doesn’t bother me. I mean, it would bother me in real life. But it’s fun when a character has a specific part of their personality that takes action easily. In this case, it’s bitterness. Isaiah could easily become part of a political plot…[Read more]