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@whalekeeper

I like it! Isaiah and Cedrick are more interesting together than apart.

Glad to hear they are a good combo. Sometime what make a good character isn’t so much who he is, but who he’s with.

As for the world, your inspiration photos are close to what I pictured while I read. There was this sense of dry coldness in the described…

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@ellette-giselle

Wait what? You mean you don’t use spell check for the other book and still manage to have something readable?!

I didn’t know other writers couldn’t spell until I joined KP. XD I’ve rarely needed spell check. But my handwriting is horrible, and people can’t read it, so the skills balance out.

@ellette-giselle

*laughing very hard* *stops* Wait what? You mean you don’t use spell check for the other book and still manage to have something readable?!

If I did that…… *shudders*

Lucky boy. I can’t believe your brain lets you do that.

Um… yes. I’m following the rule of first drafts to ignore grammar and turn off spell check. I guess I…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

I like it! Isaiah and Cedrick are more interesting together than apart. Isaiah’s “code” doesn’t bother me. I mean, it would bother me in real life. But it’s fun when a character has a specific part of their personality that takes action easily. In this case, it’s bitterness. Isaiah could easily become part of a political plot…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint thanks!

@keilah-h

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@keilah-h

You can’t comment? I can go fix that.

It’s a shame we can’t comment yet. I have some good ones.

@linus-smallprint ok! I’ll go read it!

@keilah-h

I didn’t! Where’s the appendix?

Right after the story in the same document

@ellette-giselle

Hey! Scythe! My dad and brothers LOVE that game. Funny thing is, I can’t stand it, but I’m the one that got them into it by buying it for them. 😂 Weirdly enough, I was picturing this kingdom like the scythe art, so that’s super funny.

It is a neat world, and the artwork is very good (though I wouldn’t recommend looking the artis…[Read more]

Did you see that note in the appendix explaining what he is?

I didn’t! Where’s the appendix?

@keilah-h

Isaiah really does have a wonky moral code, ngl.

I know. But that’s what makes him interesting and why I had to write this down.

I like how the perspective is that of the not-dog, whatever he is. Him getting distracted by the food was hilarious.

Did you see that note in the appendix explaining what he is?

@ellette-giselle

https://drive.proton.me/urls/23F48VDN88#loAxe5eW0Gli

This link should work for you

@ellette-giselle

Your computer:

@keilah-h

Okay. I fixed that. Thank you!

@savannah_grace2009 Have fun!! 😁

@liberty

I definitely got that difference, but having you explain it helped even more.

Is Jace younger than the others? You described him as a boy multiple times.

Guy… we didn’t really get much there, but I got the impression he is haunted by his past. Lol.

@keilah-h

I haven’t, sorry. She’s kept writing it thoguh, right? I might go back and catch up.

Thank you! She’s entirely finished book one in this series, and the full thing should be in the document.

@ellette-giselle

I’m fine, and they’re fine. Was pretty shaken up, but also weirdly cool.

Okay. Glad to hear that!

Gave me some insight into writing adrenaline charged characters.

Of course you would come out of an accident and say this!