TheArcaneAxiom

@TheArcaneAxiom

Hmm, so my worldbuilding is pretty solid, and very real for me, because I literally have places based off of real things. For example, I have an underground trade city in the Nevari Desert that is directly based off of Derinkuyu, Cappadocia. I have a whole tribe that has ties to the Basotho, geographically, and culturally, and I…[Read more]

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@thearcaneaxiom

I have finally nailed down some details for the magic system in my WIP (the post I made about it is still being moderated apparently, even though it was a week ago, unless it got lost somehow. Do you think I should repost it?)

It’s still a bit rough, but here’s how it works so far. I wanted to make it feel…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

One issue I immediately have is with the name and the first element. If it is called “essence burning” does that not show an inherent bias to the only element that has anything to do with burning?

I forgot to address this. The name is the result of laziness on my part, and I have always considered it a placeholder. The “bu…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

Thanks for all this! It definitely helps!

One thing I notice that I find interesting is that you mention the rainbringers can change the temperature of water. This isn’t uncommon in Greek elemental systems, but why is it unique to water?

Basically, the reason I did this is that water seemed the weakest of the four. If all you c…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

I like your idea of that the magic words are evil because of the purpose given by the Pythonos. So I might use that? I’m still not sure, haha!

Names of people:

Ottoline, Marcurious, Sparrow, Rishona, Berko, Sef, Lilitu, Azazel, Indie, Jordan (I need a new name for him, an evil one, so if you could help that would be great!),…[Read more]

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@thearcaneaxiom
@other any magic system people

So you may remember the magic system I shared a few weeks ago, called “Essenceburning.” (I’ll repost it below for easier reference.) I said I wasn’t particularly happy with it. It feels a bit derivative. Partially that’s because it uses elements, which is probably the most…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

what do you mean by a list of names and consonants?

Do you mean names of characters?

@grcr

Thank you! Yes, I do like the name and it seemed to fit her character! That’s funny that you have a sister named Neveah! haha

@thearcaneaxiom

Interesting, so in that case, what would have allowed a universal language to come about? A grand unification? Maybe just a tongue similar to what is happing with English that simply became more…

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@thearcaneaxiom

Great! What language would it be? Would you want a universal Andromedan tongue, or something for each of the groups, or even something else entirely?

Just a universal Andromedan language and some magic words.

@thearcaneaxiom

Makes sense. Though that leaves me with some questions about the first chapter still. Why give Jordan and his wife such a beginning? Despite making it obvious that they are evil, you’ve humanized them by giving them a dying child, and having them feel grief. Also, why did you project Kratos in a negative light almost directly, w…

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@savannah_grace2009

I’ve just chosen not to put “good” magic in my story, because that’s just what I believe and what I’ve been taught (and because I’m not sure if I’m mature enough to do otherwise).

That’s a perfectly valid reason, and I recognize trying to convince you of anything is just not what this conversation is for – which is fine 😊
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@thearcaneaxiom

@any other Mistborn fans

I’ll go first. I’m picking the following:

1 Thug

1 Lurcher

1 Coinshot

1 Smoker

1 Leacher

1 Pulser

1 Slider

The plan:

The Lurcher and Coinshot will prevent the Mistborn from using coins as weapons. The Smoker stays back, making a coppercloud that prevents the…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

Sorry, i’m not good at explaining things, especially my stories! All I know is that Earth is the same Earth, and I think that Adam and Eve don’t exist either in “stories” or anything. I think that I’m trying to make this story for the secular world to speak truth (i think sometimes if the world knows that somethings from the…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom @whalekeeper

Okay thanks Whaley! And yes number 1 is Rishona.

@savannah_grace2009

What I think @thearcaneaxiom is asking you:

Which of these two is Rishona?

1. Inspired by Eve, but is actually a different person, in a different fantastical world. Not actually Eve, just a shadow of Eve.

2. Actually Eve. In a twisted version of Earth, where some details of reality have been changed.

@savannah_grace2009 @thearcaneaxiom

Just watching from afar and thought I’d chip in.

I think from reading some of Savannah’s work, it is heavily parallel to the stories of the Bible, but you can’t really guess something like that as the reader, because unless the writer clarifies their intent, an Eve-Allegory and an Alternate-Eve are essen…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

Right, she represents Eve, but is she literally Eve? Is Earth here the same Earth we know, and therefore the story of Adam and Eve is really just a translation of Rishona’s story?

Well I think that Rishona is literally Eve in my story, and Earth is the same earth we know but I think what I was going for is that there’s no Adam a…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

“What is magick?” She tested out the foreign world, mulling it over in her mind.

“Ahh, yes, I suppose you wouldn’t know,” he said airily. Rishona bristled at his mocking tone. Her stomach clenched, and she ground her teeth as her jaw hardened defiantly. What was this emotion, she wondered. She had never felt this way before. N…

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@thearcaneaxiom (I enjoy talking philosophy and all that so thanks for the input) @whalekeeper *Coughs* yeah… I changed a lot

but I feel that I now have a stronger plot

So I think I feel like I’m going to take the approach of good and evil and make God not exist in this universe, but still put Christian themes in here

Although I don’t think…[Read more]