Scoutillus Finch

lemme try again

@keilah-h

It’s truly a shame, really. TRON has so much potential, and on one hand I’d love to see it become a franchise, but on the other, I don’t know if it would get the Star Wars/Marvel treatment if it was resurrected. Bottom line, I would only want it resurrected if the person in charge was someone I could trust to use it for a good story,…[Read more]

@keilah-h

I fight for the users too!

@savannah_grace2009

I did read Marcurious’s intro, and it was pretty interesting!

I’ll check it out!

@rae

Interesting! How can you foreshadow Grathmere before this point perhaps? does Alpha have powers that are similar that Nahim makes him hide?

The scene is to be written like a horror, if you will, with the reader feeling dread and fear. I’m not good enough to write that way rn. Especially since I don’t read horror. This is actually the onl…

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@savannah_grace2009

I’m so flattered you value my opinion!

I might be able to help a little, but I am a hobby writer so I can’t guarantee how often I’m able to critique/post, but I can get started on giving you my opinion on the excerpt I saw introducing Marcurious tomorrow perhaps. I wish I could guarantee you help, but I might have plans…[Read more]

@rae

I’ll make a full reply later since I’m angry at myself rn, and when I get angry, most ppl think it’s at them. Same with disappointment.

It’s ok, I totally get it! And don’t be angry at yourself, we’ve all had those moments. Sometimes I get really frustrated with whatever I’m doing and get super mad at my story and self for it not being what…[Read more]

I’ll try later lol

Oops it’s not working lol. so sorry about that!

Retry:

Also, here’s a drawing of my characters! ( thought you might like to see)

Top 5 Myths to Avoid When Writing about Grief

Here’s another one, I hope these help! (they’re what I can find lol)

Three Ways to Use Subtext to “Show, Don’t Tell”

this one may help, I’ll go look for some others, I can’t find the old stuff 😪

@rae

Hi! I finally finished the critique!

Evening came, leaving the Banorian landscape lit by flickering torches under a deep blue sky. The trees still rippled in the wind, but they were now just dark shadows.

Nahim walked away from where he had left Mandin, the Ward in the annual meeting at the close of this festive day. He was invited by…[Read more]

@rae

Hi!

I just wanted to let you know that I finished reading the second half of chapter two, and I’ll get started on giving you my thoughts, sorry this has taken so long!

@Rae (forgot to tag you earlier lol)

Also, what is the end goal of your plot? Reuniting the galaxy and reversing what Grathmere did while working with him? I recommend making Grathmere somewhat morally relatable (think Edmund Dantes from The Count of Monte Cristo)

That is revealed later on in the book. While Nahim thought that it was impossible, someone did come into the grasslandsxand found him. Not Mandin though.

I see, maybe you could include something about Nahim’s confusion?

Oh, you’ve discovered my weird habit of writing. I’m thinking about breaking it. I write from the view of a girl from fan…

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