@savannah_grace2009
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Koshka replied to the topic PLEASE TEAR THIS APART–URGENT CRITIQUES NEEDED in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
*Cracks knuckles*
First off, that sounds awesome.
Second, Thursday? That’s a pretty tight crunch, but you can do this. Right? Right.
I’ll read through and give what thoughts I have ect. and (if you’d like) typos/errors I catch. What type of accountability do you want? I can email you daily, you can email me, whatever you…[Read more]
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TheShadow replied to the topic Worth All the World in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
The chapters are good so far, I like the cozy feel. I agree with @savannah_grace2009 that it’s moving a bit fast, but other than that everything’s good. Nice job!!
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
haha!
Well thanks for understanding. I’ll try to read it as soon as possible, but I’m not sure when that will be.
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Trailblazer replied to the topic Rainbows, unicorns, and random questions in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 1 year, 6 months ago
Ok here are some of my initial thoughts- I haven’t thought about this all fully, but this is what comes to mind after reading what everyone else has said thus far.
I agree with what @savannah_grace2009 said about stating what you believe rather than immediately coming against someone else. Often if someone feels attacked, they put up…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
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Stepheroni and Cheese started the topic Rainbows, unicorns, and random questions in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 1 year, 6 months ago
@linus-smallprint @ellette-giselle @whalekeeper @theducktator @liberty @loopylin @keilah-h @rae @hybridlore @savannah_grace2009 @theshadow @trailblazer @smiley @the_lost-journal @esther-c (Please tag other people if you want…I probably forgot someone lol)
So.
This is a very interesting topic. Why, you ask?
Because I’m about to ask you a…[Read more]
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Esther replied to the topic Worth All the World in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
Ohhhh my wordddd
Ok that actually makes so much sense. I felt like the story was moving too fast and wasn’t exactly sure how to slow it down.
Thanks for pointing that out!! <33
Mmm. If that’s how other books do it, I guess it could work. I looked it up and some people say to extend the vowels and smooth con…
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Esther replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
Mmmm…that does make sense, I’m just not sure how to do that.
Instead of “hope”, my characters are trying to fix their problems themselves. Which might be a “false hope”, but I don’t really see it as hope. I understand what you mean, I’m just not exactly sure how to do that.
Ok! Yeah, again, do what you wanna do. But if you…[Read more]
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Andrew posted a new activity comment 1 year, 6 months ago
@beth-torres @savannah_grace2009 @power @theducktator
You guys all seem to have endless questions. You may be wondering, “Who shall answer these questions?” or “Oh, what ever shall we do?” But fear not! I have come to the rescue. I have come to answer all the questions you long answers for.
“Are fingers hand extensions?” Yes, ofc
“Every…[Read more]
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Enid replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
*Watches conversation from afar* Hm… *Peeks in* @savannah_grace2009 have you ever heard of Promise, Progress, and Payoff?
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
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Esther replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
My story is not a lighthearted, hopeful story, at least in the beginning. Right now it’s supposed to be “depressing” and dark. Honestly, to add sprinkles of hope in wouldn’t work for what’s going to happen in the next few chapters. Because right now, none of my characters know God, and so without God there is no hope. I want to…
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Esther replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
Ok, so I told you I’d finish reading your book by the end of February, and I did! But I only started like two days ago. 🤣 Here are my thoughts! (Excuse any typos, I was doing this in the car, lol!)
Ok, so the biggest thing I noticed was the lack of hope throughout the story. The characters seemed to think about death a lot…[Read more]
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freedom replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 6 months ago
@savannah_grace2009 hehe I’m glad you’re excited🤭 @ellette-giselle @rae @keilah-h @theducktator @grcr @highscribeofaetherium @koshka @elishavet-pidyon @anyone-else-idk-lol-?
Soooo I just wanted to say that me having this fantasy idea doesn’t really change anything about the Broken and Redeemed Trilogy. Though I love this new idea, Leon/Riker…[Read more]
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Esther replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 6 months ago
I guess we could have them meet up in the hall on the way to class. 🤷🏻♀️ Idek when the school dance is anymore. XDXD
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Esther replied to the topic Worth All the World in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
That’s so funny…My sister Hallie’s nickname is Hal…we call her that all the time XDXD
When she was little we used to call her HalPal…we don’t really use that anymore but I laugh remembering that, it was pretty cute hahaha
Awww, I love that!! 🥰😂
I’M SERIOUS…I LOVE IT SO MUCH
It’s seriously such an encouragement hea…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic KP GOOGLE MEET!!!!!!!!! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 6 months ago
@mineralizedwritings (Hi! How are you? Haven’t seen you in forever!) @theducktator @savannah_grace2009 @grcr @whalekeeper @esther-c @koshka @elishavet-pidyon @ellette-giselle @loopylin @highscribeofaetherium @theshadow @liberty @freed_and_redeemed @kyronthearcanin @trailblazer @acancello @anyone-else-i-forgot
Hear ye, hear ye! God willing, t…[Read more]
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Esther replied to the topic Worth All the World in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
Bruh…
Ok we’re gonna try this again.
@theducktator @savannah_grace2009 @keilah-h @theshadow @grcr @smiley
Chapter 4
“I haven’t seen Antonio all day… He must not be a sophomore.” Hallie stood on her tiptoes, peering over the heads of the students who roamed the cafeteria.
“You trippin’? I thought you didn’t care that much.” Jennifer pl…[Read more]
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Esther replied to the topic Worth All the World in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
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Esther replied to the topic Worth All the World in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
Awwww!!!
But in six months he’s moving to Florida for college…..😭😭
At least I have a little brother <333 I love him to DEATH…I literally love him so muchhhh
That is so funny that your MC is named Hallie because (I know I’ve told you this before but Imma say it again hahaha) my little sister’s name is Hallie!!! so it’s just…
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bruh
you ruined my shower thoughts XDXD
nooooooo
You’re welcome XDXD
do you just…like…stalk random people XDXD
I totally forgot about this conversation because it was so long ago hahahaha
Ok, I admit it, I was stalking a little. But I bookmarked this page because I wanted to answer all the questions (which I did), but I forgot about it for a while until I was looking for something to do and I found this bookmark 🙂
I agree mostly to your sagely sageness, BUT this —-> ““Is there another word for synonym?” Nope” is not the truth! I, in my wisely wisdom that I might have stolen off of a reddit page, shall declare unto you the synonym of synonym!!! Hear my voice; ye wives of Lamech, hearken unto my speech!!!!! (Don’t you feel bad for his wives. 😬)
The syn…[Read more]
Hmm, yes, I see your point. BUT this –> “I might have stolen off of a reddit page” show to me and my sagely sageness that your argument is invalid due to the factly fact that Reddit is not a source for the wisely wise.
What to you mean Reddit is nor a source for the wisely wise!??! That’s just what L.E.A.P. (League of Evil and Abnoxious Professors) want us to think! They want us to waste our weekend slaving over essays and not frolicking through forest, dancing among dandelions, and letting our brain atrophy while we stare fixedly at our phone screens!
Amazing things I have found out via Reddit
1) You can sneeze your back back into alinement.
2) You can survive a gunshot to the heart. (There where stats, and stats never lie. So, there is only a 95% chance you will die.)
3) Do your research before you choose a scuba diving excursion company.
Noooo, shower thoughts have been destroyed forever!
Heeheeheeheehee, I’ve have done what I have been made to do