Andrew

@jonas

Okay…… I put yes…. but that honestly depends on what kind of time I have. I may have to drop back to feedback…. or nothing.

@ellette-giselle @grcr @hybridlore @highscribeofaetherium @rae @theducktator @loopylin @whalekeeper @elishavet-pidyon @koshka @savannah_grace2009

Okay, sorry for taking so long to get back to this. I have a google form here to figure out how to best organize this. Please fill this out, even if you are just planning on giving feedback.           …[Read more]

@hybridlore

Wait really!!!!

*jumps around cheering*

Yahoo!!!!

My beautiful baby and his beautiful snoot

@savannah_grace2009

I like it! I like how you’re beginning to integrate action on Sef’s part. I definitely want to see an explanation for why she is stronger than other people the pythonos use. I’d guess her strength comes from hope, but she doesn’t seem to have any up until this point.

@keilah-h

Oh, I write all of the above plus some. idk. The MC is a teenage guy in most of it, but then so were Joseph and Aaron. 🤷🏼‍♀️

@ellette-giselle lol

I was thinking maybe it’s like an adventure story or a war story and they’re all excited about that. Your other ones from what I can tell are more missionary, persecution, or godly-romance stories, and most boys I know of aren’t super into that, especially the last one. But I don’t know.

@keilah-h

Aw thank you so much!!! I can’t wait. Yay! One member has joined the team!

What do your brothers love so much about it?

I hope you can discover that, because I don’t know…………

What do your brothers love so much about it?

@Ellette-giselle I will at least be there to give spelling and grammar advice. I wouldn’t pass up another great book from you!

@hybridlore    @keilah-h

Thank you, thank you, thank you very much. *twirls hat dramatically because for some reason that is the mental image I have* Feedback like this is always super helpful.

In answer to Hybrid’s question, this book is about the length of the first one with the middle two being the longest. I just submitted really bi…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Okay, I will try to get you some answers before too long

@whalekeeper @loopylin @jonas @rae @raxforge yeah! I’d love to join this.

all right, time to answer the questions:

Characters:

~Which character(s) did you find the most compelling/relatable/believable and why?

I think your protagonists were the best.

~ Were there any character that need to be more engaging? If so, how would be some good ways for me to do that?

I do agree with Hybridlore that since Fox was the…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

That was a short chapter, but pretty good!

@freed_and_redeemed      @hybridlore     @koshka     @keilah-h       @elishavet-pidyon       @linus-smallprint

QUESTIONS!

Characters:

~Which character(s) did you find the most compelling/relatable/believable and why?

~ Were there any character that need to be more engaging? If so, how would be some good ways for me to do tha…[Read more]

@loopylin

Ayla

I was trying to decide whether to pretend I was in the Triwizard Tournament or under King Minos’ castle when I noticed a tunnel. I knelt down and peered into it, wishing I had a light. A small girl stared back.

“Hark! A human! Greetings, fellow wander! Whither goest thou?” Hopefully whither was correct. I never could remember the…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

I will. It’ll be a bit odd this time because I feel like I already asked most of them on LOS. I should have a few though.