Andrew

@rae I like it! What happened to Baron? He sounds like he got really messed up. Poor guy.

@theshadow thank you!

Ooh, I really love the idea of Old Hunter looking kinda like Sniper but obviously older and with scars or something. Maybe I’ll add a part about how Huntress feels whenever she looks at him, how it stings that they look so much alike yet the one who loves her is dead, and the other remains alive to torment her.

(why do I w…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

thx.

I did have a scene before this one, but I didn’t deem it ready for posting, since there are a few things I want to smooth out first. Hopefully that scene will make it flow better.

@rae

I like this a lot!! This section is good. I was trying to remember what happened beforehand. So far the stories have flowed, even though they are individual stories. This one seems a little out of place regarding the last one.

otherwise, i like this!!

@ellette-giselle @hybridlore @whalekeeper @keilah-h

Sorry for not posting in eight days. I hit Writer’s Block while trying to edit the next story to go on here and writing the next one 🙁

I’m not sure how long until I can post the full thing, but until then, I’m gonna post a snippet of the next…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

awesome! Glad I could be of help.

I think we’re all a little defensive of our stuff. 😂

I remember when you kept criticizing Aaron I was crushed because he’s a lot like me and I felt like you were criticizing me and saying I was a cardboard cutout. It took a few weeks for me to separate myself from him and see your cri…[Read more]

@elishavet-pidyon

Very nice! I really like the squirrel. The scientist is another one of my favourites. Your watercolour is good. That is a style I would like to get into, but never have gotten around to.

@linus-smallprint you’re welcome! Looking forward to book 2!

@theducktator RIP pennies.

Although I heard the reason was because copper and zinc and whatever else they were using to make ’em was getting too expensive for a coin whose value is 1 cent.

@the_lost-journal

You’re welcome!

@keilah-h @ellette-giselle

Thanks for the feedback! I thing I will go with this then.

In regards to your suggestion, Ellette, I think I might go with something that. I noticed in those paragraphs, I had fallen back into the narration style I used in the first draft. (Awkward! Overly Defensive!) This is probably part of why it feels odd to you.…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle @theducktator

Thanks for the feedback! I feel like everything is coming together now. I’m going to try to get this outline polished this week so that I can send it off to my editor for her thoughts.

Ducktator, did you see that note I added on the idea of using a slave to push Alan in the direction of trusting and obeying The…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

Sorry I took a while to get back to you.

Of the projects you shared, The Kingdom of Kaimor sounds the most interesting to me. (Like Keilah, I like animal-hybrid races) Horror/Thrillars aren’t my thing, so A Cellar’s tales and P.I.-C.A.F.E are probably the least appealing. I did read that bit of A Cellar’s tales that you sha…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

Super creepy, but interesting! Is this the entirety of the story, or is there going to be more? Either way, the mystery remains effective: if there’s more, than this is effective for piquing the reader’s interesting; if not, the questions it leaves unanswered are intriguing in and of themselves. I also liked your use of repetition.

@theshadow

I really like this chapter! Everything critical I was going to say @hybridlore already covered.

I really enjoy these characters. I like how Jack sticks up for his sister, and I’m eager to find out what happens and where Elina got her scar!

make sure to keep tagging me because I’m really enjoying this.

and those girls giving her a h…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

As a reader, is this a direction you would be satisfied to see the story take?

Yes

What do you think of the character development you see in this (specifically for Alan, Martha, Eric, and Cyrus)?

Seems solid.

Now that you’ve seen some more, what are your thoughts on the similarities between Eric and Kalmar?

I think it’s d…[Read more]

I just found out there will be no more pennies.😭😭😭They were my favorite coin. RIP.

@loopylin

As are 95% of the people in the roleplay, lol. You’d fit right in :]

Lol, okay. I think I will add a couple characters there.

@jonas

I may, but I’d need to read through, like, 40 pages, as that’s not one I stalk.😂

@loopylin

I’ve been thinking about joining the school RP, but I’m homeschooled, and therefore kind of clueless. I did however, read through all 400+ pages on a whim once, so there’s that.😂