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Active 7 months ago- Rank: Knight in Shining Armor
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Baron Chronicles in the forum Short Story Critiques 1 year, 6 months ago
I would say it was fulfilled rather than changed. The Bible says not a dot not an iota will go away and nothing will change. (Murdering the wording, but that’s the raw meaning)
Otherwise yeah! Looking forward to the next part.
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Ruth replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 6 months ago
@loopylin np
Alpha
Alpha blinked. “No, not exactly. I’m a warrior, so I fight wherever in the stars they want me this time. Only time I ever thought of assassination was with some of those annoying lords in the Council, but if I did that, they’d probably lock me up again. And that’s no fun. I think they like sticking me with needles.” A shudder…[Read more]
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Ruth replied to the topic The Baron Chronicles in the forum Short Story Critiques 1 year, 6 months ago
I will need to clear this up in the story i guess. I didn’t mean all the laws, I meant more the changes in that we no longer have to sacrifice animals because Jesus came as the ultimate sacrifice. The laws changed in little ways because Hope had finally come, we didn’t have to wait for it.
I will make this clearer in the text,…[Read more]
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Koshka replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 6 months ago
Oops. Poor Eddie. At least this kid does actually like to dance.
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Koshka replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 6 months ago
Sprite kid don’t get it. XD
Sypher
He followed the lasses in, settling into the seat be across from them.
“Eddie. Ellie. Ah.” He blinked at her in concentration. Grinned. “I am named Sypher, but everyone who doesn’t call me that, calls me Syph. As for dancing, or rather…I don’t believe I understand. What days are open”
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Koshka replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 6 months ago
Leo
He grinned. “First off you’re going to sit on that couch in the basement break room and sort a bucket of bolts and screws that I accidentally dumped together last week. Or maybe that was two weeks ago.” He paused to blink up at the ceiling for a moment, then refocused on Rory. “Anyway, you’ll do that while I check the work…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Baron Chronicles in the forum Short Story Critiques 1 year, 6 months ago
this was another good section. I feel like you’re really sinking into a good style and voice with this. I had a slight problem with one sentence though.
When Immanuel came, the laws God previously had placed changed.
I don’t see that in the Bible. If anything, the laws were reinforced more strongly. (You have heard it said do not commit adu…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic Denomination Q and A in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 1 year, 6 months ago
Thankfully it’s not canon for obvious reasons.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic TNPT: The Sword – Outlining in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 1 year, 6 months ago
Who is James? (I think I want him to be someone who is laid back and jokes around a lot, but occasionally has a moment where he shows surprising wisdom.
oh. That’s not at all how I pictured him.
idk if this is a good idea, but I pictured him as quieter and much more thoughtful. Someone who is constantly watching and l…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic Denomination Q and A in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 1 year, 6 months ago
well there is like two ships that are straight… BUT ONE OF THEM IS WITH A BROTHER AND SISTER! THESE PEOPLE ARE TWISTED IN THE MIND!!!!!!)
ngl incest ships are worse for me. Gay ships? Disgusting. I hate them. But at the same time, that’s the way the world is going, and while I don’t agree with it I’m not gonna be surpris…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Baron Chronicles in the forum Short Story Critiques 1 year, 6 months ago
@rae oooh! His old friend came to stay where he was, that’s nice!
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Enid replied to the topic Prayer Requests for Anyone in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 1 year, 6 months ago
Turns out, my brother’s cord was broken in three places. This may have happened because of how much he’s grown. Because of the scar tissue around the cord, the fluid is still able to pass through his body safely, and he doesn’t need surgery!
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Enid replied to the topic Sprint Channel in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 6 months ago
Done, and officially less stressed about the assignment now.
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Enid replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 6 months ago
What do you think? Pretty sure your email is visible on there as well as mine.
I’m good with it. *thumbs up* It might be a good idea to post it on your profile, rather than directly on the forum.
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Enid replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 6 months ago
Hehe, it definitely is. XD
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Ruth replied to the topic The Baron Chronicles in the forum Short Story Critiques 1 year, 6 months ago
@kielah-h @ellette-giselle @raxforge @whalekeeper @hybridlore
This is the final part of Story 9.
In my writing document, I named this story temporarily as ‘Delirium’ but I would like some better title ideas if you can give me some. Thx in advance.
Five days had passed since Baron had been taken to the Handel mansion and his symptoms…[Read more]
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Enid replied to the topic Sprint Channel in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 6 months ago
Hey guys! I’m going to work from 2:15 to some undetermined time. I have to jot down the full outline for my senior thesis, and go down some hopefully valuable rabbit trails. You know how research is. I’d love to have company!
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic TNPT: The Sword – Outlining in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 1 year, 6 months ago
@ellette-giselle @theducktator
Okay, good. Thanks!
so, does this mean you’re gonna start posting chapters?! 😃
Not quite. Now that the core is taking shape, I’m getting ready to move into a more structured outline, and need to decide which of all the middle events I have planned will suit the story best. I also still need to figure out some of t…[Read more]
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FIREQUACKER replied to the topic Prayer Requests for Anyone in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 1 year, 6 months ago
Praying. 💛
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FIREQUACKER replied to the topic The Quote Archive in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 6 months ago
“You look like a hot dog truck that crashed into a flower shop.” -my brother
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