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@ellette-giselle

Got it. Tell her happy birthday!

@elishavet-pidyon
Thank you! And I’m glad the examples made sense to someone besides me. The characters must be protected not only for themselves, but for the sake of story legacy. ⚔️

@loopylin

Too hesitant to kill off characters who probably should actually die for the plot/ their own arc.

Some people are definitely more like that. I fall…[Read more]

Oh yeah, I just remembered. I discussed this with another book-reading friend, and that’s why it was in my mind.

@linus-smallprint @ellette-giselle @keilah-h @theducktator

New chapters!

@ellette-giselle

Yeahh xD If I had stopped to think about it, I probably would have expected something to happen with it.

Oh yeah. Thanks for the reminder. XD

@ellette-giselle

Oh, that.

I didn’t see it coming, but I should have. 😂

@ellette-giselle

I do remember Julian talking to Ernst about his father, if that’s what you’re talking about. Nice to get a glimpse into his state of mind before… well…

@ellette-giselle

Oh no. 😭 Poor Rolf.

I really liked this section… even though it was sad. You did a good job with the action and tying in Lieutenant Roth’s story to the main plot.

@koshka

*Drops on the floor and makes a confetti angel*

@theducktator

I might go to college! I’m choosing to take an extra year of classes by myself, a super senior year. But it’s optional and I’m doing it to choose specific interests and decide if I want to pursue them or not.

Plus I need time to learn more practical life skills, grow healthy, etc.

@theducktator

You don’t have to do it this year. But I will tell everyone who doesn’t have their own to-edit material that CEW actually supplies a bunch of stuff to edit if you need it. I’ll use some of their material myself. 🙂

This was my last day of high school. Thank you, KP, for being an awesome past-time in between school assignments. ✌️🙂

@ellette-giselle

That’s good that they’ll be more distinguishable— but I hope that doesn’t mean they’ll drift apart.

Yeah xD It would be interesting. It was a sweet scene though.

@ellette-giselle

I liked the transition right at the scene break before Liesl and Roland got married. And how you showed Leon’s state of mind after the fever and how Julian didn’t understand it.

@ellette-giselle

No, I was just on my phone already and I saw the notification pop up.

Not really… no suggestions really stood out. 🤷‍♀️

@ellette-giselle

Aww. Good section. I’m so glad Leon didn’t die.

@ellette-giselle

Boom, you’re done. That sounds really nice. XD

@theducktator

That is the most glorious thing I have read all week.

@esther-c

Then sign UUpppppp girl! *Pushes you towards CEW*

@ellette-giselle

Because today I am now a graduate!!!

Yay! High school or college graduate?

@ellette-giselle

Yeah, but if there’s a lot of plants, chances are there’s a lot of animals surviving off of that, which means the wolves shouldn’t be having much trouble finding food.

You could just take out this sentence:

The wolves growled, but they were hungry, and they decided the threat was worth the potential kill. The winter had been…

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@whalekeeper

Ok sounds good!

I would, but I’m focusing on writing and not editing for these next few months.