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@rae

Also what kind of things do you most want criticism on? Grammar? Style? Story structure?

I can also just read it and tell you the things I like about it. : )

@rae

Hello!

I’m sorry I didn’t see you tagging me for a while. I finally started reading your story and I’m enjoying it so far, but I’m only halfway through chapter two. I have a really hard time reading the italics and long paragraphs, but I’m not giving up! I’ll give you a longer response later when I finish it.

Thanks for tagging me. Sorry I…[Read more]

@aranel

No problem, I love explaining my story to people! (And I have been wanting to read Dune for months now, is it any good?)

I can recommend the first book to anyone with the time, but it really depends on what you want after that. The first book is much more of a hero’s journey with clear good and evil, but after that, the books become…[Read more]

@hybridlore

I agree with Min and Jonas on everything they said. Resolve of the character will balance the unresolved political structure. However there’s still a lot of things you could do to end it differently. For one thing, most dystopias almost never talk about what happens after they take down the government. They need to reestablish…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

If you check out the link I posted earlier, I’ve added some more chapters. Tell me what you think! (Sorry if I’m bugging you by asking you to read EVERY SINGLE CHAPTER, but you seem to have an eye for problems and plot holes, so I really appreciate your advice. Feel free to tell me when it gets old, lol.)

I might have a cha…[Read more]

Sorry, I’ve been offline for the past day or two.

@jonas

Both look cool, but I like the second better. The first one was your profile pic before right? Maybe it goes against the design, but some color might help? You could just tint the gray parts blue or some other color.

Yeah, it was my profile picture for a while, it’s one of my favorite…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Thanks! 😊 I’m really behind on inktober. I think it’s probably just going to turn into inkautumn for me lol.

Ok, I’m exaggerating. It was only a few people and all they did was say the character was creepy and going to give them nightmares. I think it was a month ago maybe? I’m probably just worrying a bit too much about what pe…[Read more]

@highscribeofaetherium

Thanks!
Lol, yeah, I’m just really cautious on this website now because I remember a bunch of people freaking out when someone posted a picture of a chibi cartoon character from a video game a bit ago. I guess they thought she was creepy because she had pointy teeth?

@euodia-vision ok

So uh slightly creepy warning for all the sensitive people I guess?

The prompt was path.

@smiley @whalekeeper @esther-c @euodia-vision

Ooooo shopping! I totally wanna do that!

But, uh, Felicity probably wouldn’t be too interested. Someone’s gotta convince her.

And we could also have some villain conflict too while we’re waiting for Fan.

Also I’m going to add my alien characters soon if anyone wants to meet them.

@savannah_grace2009 (Ok, awesome!) @grcr @rae @trailblazer @mineralizedwritings @freedomwriter76 @acancello

Hedieh

As Hedieh twirled around the room with Amir, she couldn’t help but smile. This was so much fun. As the music slowly stopped, Hedieh sighed and let her hands fall to her sides. “You caught on pretty quickly.”

“That doesn’t mean it w…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Oh and you asked for the plot 🤦🏻‍♀️ Oops. XD Here’s the blurb for the trilogy:

They’ve been trapped inside The Orb for twenty years. It covered all of Aletheia. But it slowly closes in on the nation. The people stuck inside have no way to communicate to those outside. Families are separated. But the people have gotten used to…

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@mineralizedwritings

GIRL!!! Bucky and Steve are SO good!

I wanna make Steve my pfp now too 😂

@savannah_grace2009

Thanks so much!!

Yeah, for sure! I do have the first draft of the first book posted somewhere on here, but it’s changed a lot since then. I’m actually planning to post the third draft as I edit it soon.

@loopylin

Well, now I really want to see it…

@savannah_grace2009

Ok, Marcurious sounds like a really cool character. 😁

@euodia-vision

Aww, thanks girl! I guess I haven’t really shared much writing on here lately. But I’ve started on the first draft of the second book, so I’ve been getting a lot more actual writing done. (Instead of just editing… editing… editing… 😂)

@savannah_grace2009

Do you mind if Hedieh finds Ottoline? Because she hasn’t really interacted with any of the other girls yet.

@esther-c

AWWW!! I’ve missed Ev and Ami!!! ❤

@spinnner4him

I love the theme and the story idea!! The only thing I’d be careful about is making the plot cliched. Some cliches aren’t bad it’s just something to look out for, especially on this story idea. But I also don’t know how you’re planning to go about writing it, or the actual details of the plot. Anyway, if you post anything about it…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 @grcr

These look awesome, you guys!!