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@whalekeeper

Maybe before the dance, we shop for outfits? There are so many shops nearby! The whole school could cancel classes today for it!

And some of the boys have yet to ask the girls! 😈

YES! But yeah, we should for sure wait for Godly, she was so excited.

I can’t remember who was going to ask Riya… I think @freedomwriter76 ‘s Bucky. But…[Read more]

@esther-c

Aww, thanks girl! I guess I haven’t really shared much writing on here lately. But I’ve started on the first draft of the second book, so I’ve been getting a lot more actual writing done. (Instead of just editing… editing… editing… 😂)

Of course! OH YAY!! So has editing book one been the main thing? How has it gone?

@smiley

I’m loving it!!

Oh wait here I changed the colors slightly (you probably can’t even tell lol)

@whalekeeper @mineralizedwritings @highscribeofaetherium @keilah-h @freedomwriter76 @anyone (y’all can ignore these tags if you want)

This is a full Rina drawing I’ve been working on for a while.

@highscribeofaetherium

Thank you for explaining 😅 I’m not a science person, so I don’t have a good grasp on all that stuff. Thanks.

That’s alright, lol! This is very helpful actually, because I need to know how much my readers know, so I can explain things properly, and not annoy them with too much explanation at the same time.

I don’t find her t…

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@whalekeeper

Ok, thanks! I can stick Felicity in the same room as the twins and some other girls and then I guess Lois can go… somewhere… eh, I’ll figure it out.

I know it’s a long shot, but Marcel might ask one of the twins to the dance. If they get to know each other. He loves origami 😊

That would be so awesome! Origami is Ellie’s favorite…[Read more]

Also, @whalekeeper , I know I’ve asked this a few times already, sorry, but how can I figure out who my character’s roommates are?

@peeps

Ok, here’s my lil alien dudes

Eddie: female, about 14 in human years ish, 3’ tall, green eyes, long brown hair in a French braid, tan skin with some green coloring, long unicorn-like tail, wears a white tank top and dark pants

Ellie: Eddie’s identical twin sister, chin length brown hair, wears a sky blue hoodie

Eddie

Eddie was dying…[Read more]

@grcr

Ooo I love this one and the other character ones you’ve posted! Your story seems really cool.

I should start making mood boards again…

@freedomwriter76

NO! *grabs Riker and Leon* don’t take ma bois from me!!!! I shall give them blankets and coco myself, thank you very much! XD

lol you better 😆

this new 😀 emoji is creeping me out just a lil bit…XD

hehe yeah sometimes my friends use that emoji when they’re trying to be threatening

@hybridlore

I can’t really think of anything right now, but I’ll definitely think it over and get back to you on it!

@freedomwriter76

Those all look so cool!

why are all my charries so saddddd 😭

Well, I don’t know. Do I need to steal them from you so they can have a break and give them each a blanket and cup of hot coco? XD

@rae

Sounds good!! I love your style, btw. It’s fresh and unique. 😊

@savannah_grace2009

I don’t think it’s too clunky. There may be a few places where it could be made a little smoother, but I’m not sure how to fix that. 😅 If this is just your first or second draft, then I think it’s definitely fine how it is. 🙂

@rae

Also what kind of things do you most want criticism on? Grammar? Style? Story structure?

I can also just read it and tell you the things I like about it. : )

@rae

Hello!

I’m sorry I didn’t see you tagging me for a while. I finally started reading your story and I’m enjoying it so far, but I’m only halfway through chapter two. I have a really hard time reading the italics and long paragraphs, but I’m not giving up! I’ll give you a longer response later when I finish it.

Thanks for tagging me. Sorry I…[Read more]

@aranel

No problem, I love explaining my story to people! (And I have been wanting to read Dune for months now, is it any good?)

I can recommend the first book to anyone with the time, but it really depends on what you want after that. The first book is much more of a hero’s journey with clear good and evil, but after that, the books become…[Read more]

@hybridlore

I agree with Min and Jonas on everything they said. Resolve of the character will balance the unresolved political structure. However there’s still a lot of things you could do to end it differently. For one thing, most dystopias almost never talk about what happens after they take down the government. They need to reestablish…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

If you check out the link I posted earlier, I’ve added some more chapters. Tell me what you think! (Sorry if I’m bugging you by asking you to read EVERY SINGLE CHAPTER, but you seem to have an eye for problems and plot holes, so I really appreciate your advice. Feel free to tell me when it gets old, lol.)

I might have a cha…[Read more]

Sorry, I’ve been offline for the past day or two.

@jonas

Both look cool, but I like the second better. The first one was your profile pic before right? Maybe it goes against the design, but some color might help? You could just tint the gray parts blue or some other color.

Yeah, it was my profile picture for a while, it’s one of my favorite…[Read more]