Lydia S.

AhA!! I have found it!

And now I consider.

*Thoughtful crickets*

Very nice. Are you going to share more soon? Because…

BWAHAHAHA

=)

@freedomwriter76

GAHHH…

That poor dear. He’s in a mess that just keeps getting messier.

*Nods*

Well done! I understood what was going on even though you never said “it may be infected” or something like that. And the rising angst and suspense…I can’t wait to see what happens next.

@freedomwriter76 @smiley

Jayson

Shy: being reserved or showing nervousness or timidity in the company of other people. The look on the girl’s face, Eleanor?, wasn’t exactly what I would call timidity. More…fear, fear that would rather stab me than shake my hand.

“Ah, that’s alright, I’ve been there before. Good to meet you, sirs.” I nodded to…[Read more]

@overcomer

Glad the post is now up!

I think it must’ve marked it as spam before because I edited it a few times?

That’s my best guess. The site tends to get a bit finicky when making edits. I’m not sure the exact cause of why this is, but I’ll be looking into it!

@overcomer @whalekeeper

Thanks for letting me know about this issue! Spam marking is an automated program and unfortunately, it is quite faulty and unrightfully marks perfectly fine posts as spam. I’m currently looking into ways to make adjustments to this program so that it’s more accurate with its spam marking.

Have you been able to get your…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76 @smiley
Eleanor. XD
Jayson

“Who are you?!”

Civilians. Great. No firearms necessary. I latched my watch back on my wrist and scrunched my eyebrows at the young lady. Faint British accent, over aggressive manner. Probably scared out of her witts if I had learned anything in Psyc.

Raphael slid his hands in his pockets with a sma…[Read more]

Note: we are still sorting out Raphael’s family history/denomination, so, besides knowing that they’re very observant, that’s kinda in the air. While he does end up messianic, he’s not quite there yet.

@freedomwriter76 @smiley

These two are written in a style that is way not my usual limited omniscient view, part of the reason they’re now joining this castle. So if the voice jumps around a bit, blame Jay.

Jayson Barans

Long gloomy halls after long muggy stairways. Just a few minutes in this place and the dark ages were making a lot more…[Read more]

@smiley @freedomwriter76

Alright, first quick descriptions.

Jayson Barans

Appearance: 5′ 10″, wavy brown hair, hazel eyes, lightly suntanned caucasian. 17 years of age.

Nationality: Canadian American. {Polish, Native, English, Irish.

Pastimes: cross country running, martial arts, books, viola, parkour, firearms.

Religion: Apostolic…[Read more]

@overcomer This is gorgeous. <3 It pulled me in so much, and the atmosphere you set up is stunning.

My only real comment is that your transition about a fourth of the way through from longer to shorter lines felt a little bit awkward? You came out of it very well at the end, but going into it and shifting the cadence of the poem felt a bit…[Read more]

@whalekeeper Thanks so much for starting this thread – these are amazing. xD I don’t have anything to add at the moment, so I’ll just lurk around taking notes. xP

@autumnlily I’m sliding in a few days late, but I think that generally, at least from what I’ve seen, middle grade is the best genre for chapter titles nowadays. (There are certainly exceptions – think The Book Thief – but as a rule of thumb, that’s what I’ve seen.) And when it comes to that, I honestly think the best chapter titles are the ones…[Read more]

@overcomer

Beautiful. The way you used layered meanings of words is making me want to get my violin out and sing. I love the ambiguous speaker who could be just anyone; you, me, a fairy child…it makes my imagination shiver.

I don’t have any real critiques, but as I just ran across this two months after it was posted, I suppose that doesn’t…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76 @smiley

Ahh, good. *Sigh* At least he doesn’t break your reader’s hearts too much.

Also, and this is random, but I just love the name Yosef. It’s one of those names that just feels perfect.

*Contemplates whether these two would help calm anything.*

*Crickets*

The more I think about this, would y’all mind if I did add…[Read more]

*a stalker appears from the shadows*

@freedomwriter76 @smiley

Isaiah lost SON? You Killed Judah? 0_0

And Eleanor…what has your author done to you?

*Glances at characters*

*Contemplates inserting two in this sadly mistreated group*

Wow. It’s been a bit since my last post on here.

The twins.

The island was silent but for the crashing waves and the distant music of wind in trees. Zlatan blinked up at the crescent moon, pale in the star cast sky.

“The lady smiles tonight.” Vulka’s voice was low. His brother rumbled in agreement. A soft murmur of some fluttering night bird…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

Cool! I can’t wait to see how KP grows in your hands! I can’t really offer any comments or advice as far as finding a job, but I’ll give your prayers for that journey!

Thank you! And I will be praying that your mission goes well and that you touch many people’s lives with God’s word and light!

Christ gave Authority to Peter to bu…

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*comes out of the shadows where I have lurked in recent days*

@rae

Intriguing story. It doesn’t sound like anything I’ve read before, although considering that most of my favorite authors are long dead that may not be worth mentioning.

At any rate, I do not believe I have properly met you either. I am Koshka, a writer of middle-grade animal…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

Leon! My darling Leon! Noooooooo…

And Riker! That’s not true! Both of you need so much healing. And prayer. And just, ugh.

Seriously Leon, try coffee. It’s much better for you.

@thearcaneaxiom

Sorry for suddenly going mia for a bit, one of my co-workers got sick so I had a few extra shifts this week and haven’t been able to get online until now!

Anyway, good to be back again, yet again!

It’s been going really well! I’ve been working, doing some writing (obviously,) and preparing for a two-year mission that will hop…

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