Rylie Goodwin

@arien

Oh! I love it. The characters are intriguing, the setting/world is interesting, and the concept is really fun. I want to read the rest!

I especially liked the way you describe the characters bit by bit. The piece where the candlelight is illuminating Aedan’s face was an especially fine part to read. I love the way it formed his features…[Read more]

Eira

At last, class in over. I gather my things and brush my hair back over one shoulder. It slips through my fingers like limp silk, slight waves all that is left of my curls. With a sigh I heave my backpack into place and shuffle from the room into another empty hall. Why the schedule here makes no sense, I don’t know nor do I care.

My feet…[Read more]

@felicity

I stalked for some time too. It’s totally fun!

Why thank you, I thought so too. XD

@godlyfantasy12

I hope you don’t mind me putting them in the same class, but I had another scene idea…

Inglor

Nyx wanted to skip class, that much was clear.  He frowned slightly and traced the leaf on his shirt collar. “Geometry? I have that also.” He glanced at Almarrin.

“Psychology of aggression.” The grey eyes were smiling.

“Ai! Well…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Viktor

“Ah, thanks anyway! I’ll find him after class.”

Concern flooded through him, filling his eyes and face. He leaned forward and touched the back of her seat.

“Is this a… brother?”

She sighed. “My little brother.”

“When did he disappear? Is this like him?”

Grimm gave a low, sympathetic laugh and Jocelyn huffed. “He s…[Read more]

@starofthenorth

Oooo, I want more of these characters, even if I’m not exactly a romance reader. That does help with the background. =)

@keilah-h @godlyfantasy12 @freedomwriter76 @koshka @wilder-w

Ok!

Reúven & others

Well, here they were. Literature right off the top. Reúven pulled a chair out for Liora and he and Viktor sat down on either side.

The teacher had stepped out to talk with another teacher in the hall, letting the  students settle in before class started. She wa…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76 @elishavet-pidyon  @godlyfantasy12

Almarrin

The elf smiled. “Êl síla erin lû e-govaned vîn, Dolunay, Nyx. I am Inglor Avelorion, and this is my friend Almarrin Woden.”

Almarrin bowed, but his attention was moving on. “Classes, Inglor.”

“Brother,” Inglor clamped a hand on his arm. “Are these your manners?”

“I bowe…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

Go pound em, Ezra!!!!

@freedomwriter76 @elishavet-pidyon  @godlyfantasy12

Yes, the Alven have pointed ears, but they’re regular size. (Luna is adorable)

Inglor

Most of the students here walked in shadow as if fear itself lurked in the corners. They also gave Almarrin and him a wide berth. He frowned, the dance in his step diminishing.

Then a smile, one bright,…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Actually, I don’t know. XD

Lyn and Grimm might be fun, since they haven’t really run into each other very much in the other RP.

And Lynn may have some fun.

@keilah-h @godlyfantasy12 @freedomwriter76 @koshka @wilder-w

The poor baby!

Also, I have an idea for a scene for later after Alwin has met some more charries in which he gets knocked over and… his backpack falls open. 

But for now…

Alwin

An annoying buzz sounded overhead, calling Alwin’s attention to his slow feet. He sped up, his worn t…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

My phone is about to die though, so It would be better if you introduce them, while I hunt for my charger.

@godlyfantasy12

Sure! (Nyx and Almarrin…that would be hilarious)

@wilder-w @keilah-h @godlyfantasy12 (November!!!) @koshka @freedomwriter76

Reúven

Golden sunlight splashed across the crowd of students, staining everything in light. Reúven squinted at the brightness and shifted his eyes away.

Better to not burn spots into his vision.

Viktor walked beside him like a young soldier going to court martial. The b…[Read more]

@elishavet-pidyon

Go ahead!

@godlyfantasy12

I just had this scene pop into my head where Luna and Inglor meet!

“Well, hello, little sister.” Blinks at her purple hair and eyes with a slightly bewildered ‘where are you from?’ expression.

@freedomwriter76

I’m just going through the forum, and what should meet my eyes?

THAT SCENE WAS AWESOME! And hilarious, and sooo sweet! I love the way Riker swaps from understanding friend to protective brother. It’s perfect!

@godlyfantasy12

Ugh, November…*groan* no one better touch him again! I have an elf and a half-elf in my ranks.

(Yes Aramis, that was a threat)

@godlyfantasy12

I can! Should I hop in with my threesome?

@starofthenorth

Hmmm, that was really fun to read! I love the “Christopher is king” dynamic to pieces!

As for critiques, I would basically repeat everyone else. From what you asked, I don’t think you’re intending to make them feminist etc., so I would bring the emphasis off of the catch words and more on the characters. It’s Briana against…[Read more]