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@hybridlore

Okay, I see what you mean. Are you thinking like, within their friend groups? Most of the story so far takes place either at school, the church meetings, or their house. Later, though, there will probably be a lot of scenes at their respective job assignments, so you’ll get to see more of the culture then. Do you have any ideas for s…

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@koshka

Rory

“Bolts and screws, bolts and screws.” Rory muttered slowly. For the amount of things they taught in Academy, there was very little about normal life. Mostly about killing and the most effective ways to do it. Rory racked his brain. The two words were familiar, but he couldn’t remember having encountered the things they repre…[Read more]

@rae

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I can not believe he just said that to Dante

@rae

I would say it was fulfilled rather than changed. The Bible says not a dot not an iota will go away and nothing will change. (Murdering the wording, but that’s the raw meaning)

Otherwise yeah! Looking forward to the next part.

@loopylin np

Alpha

Alpha blinked. “No, not exactly. I’m a warrior, so I fight wherever in the stars they want me this time. Only time I ever thought of assassination was with some of those annoying lords in the Council, but if I did that, they’d probably lock me up again. And that’s no fun. I think they like sticking me with needles.” A shudder…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I will need to clear this up in the story i guess. I didn’t mean all the laws, I meant more the changes in that we no longer have to sacrifice animals because Jesus came as the ultimate sacrifice. The laws changed in little ways because Hope had finally come, we didn’t have to wait for it.

I will make this clearer in the text,…[Read more]

@hybridlore @esther-c @theducktator

Thanks y’all!!

@whalekeeper @loopylin

Praying 🙏

@rae

this was another good section. I feel like you’re really sinking into a good style and voice with this. I had a slight problem with one sentence though.

When Immanuel came, the laws God previously had placed changed.

I don’t see that in the Bible. If anything, the laws were reinforced more strongly. (You have heard it said do not commit adu…[Read more]

Thankfully it’s not canon for obvious reasons.

@linus-smallprint

Who is James? (I think I want him to be someone who is laid back and jokes around a lot, but occasionally has a moment where he shows surprising wisdom.

oh. That’s not at all how I pictured him.

idk if this is a good idea, but I pictured him as quieter and much more thoughtful. Someone who is constantly watching and l…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

well there is like two ships that are straight… BUT ONE OF THEM IS WITH A BROTHER AND SISTER! THESE PEOPLE ARE TWISTED IN THE MIND!!!!!!)

ngl incest ships are worse for me. Gay ships? Disgusting. I hate them. But at the same time, that’s the way the world is going, and while I don’t agree with it I’m not gonna be surpris…[Read more]

@rae oooh! His old friend came to stay where he was, that’s nice!

@esther-c

It looks a lot better! One thing I noticed is that Antonio does say “fabuloso” twice.

“Then the topic conveniently comes up in a conversation with Easton.”

Also, I feel like this might be better if you just change it to “Then I can ask Easton” or something like that. Otherwise, it looks great! I like the way you made Hallie more rea…[Read more]

Turns out, my brother’s cord was broken in three places. This may have happened because of how much he’s grown. Because of the scar tissue around the cord, the fluid is still able to pass through his body safely, and he doesn’t need surgery!

Done, and officially less stressed about the assignment now.

@loopylin

What do you think? Pretty sure your email is visible on there as well as mine.

I’m good with it. *thumbs up* It might be a good idea to post it on your profile, rather than directly on the forum.

@freed_and_redeemed

girl I need you to write that book!!!

MUST. HAVE. MORE. FANTASY.

🤭🤭🤭

@freed_and_redeemed

Hehe, it definitely is. XD

@esther-c

girllll

i love thissss

Keep writing ✨✨

*pops head in*

I’m so happy to see this forum still active and well🥹🥲