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@theshadow 😁

@godlyfantasy12 ooh that’s a good scene!

Riven seems to be different than in your previous drafts. He’s a bit more conniving and less “I’m evil cause I can be!”

I’m a bit worried that what he calls “protecting” A’grend doesn’t mean truly protecting it. But maybe he’s telling the truth. I don’t know.

@ellette-giselle yikes! that’s messed up. Although I’m glad the rest of your team realized it was wrong.

Don’t graduate our MEDICAL STUDENTS with horrible grades. That’s just unwise.

actually saw a thing about that, where a girl and her parents actually sued the school she went to for graduating her with a high score when she can barely rea…[Read more]

@theshadow great job!! Can’t wait for more!

@ellette-giselle

Yeah, that would be a cool scene! I’ll have to try to see if I can fit something like that into the story.

@theshadow

Okay, great! 😊

@godlyfantasy12

Ohhh, I’m kind of in a similar position as I’m writing the second draft of a WIP. I’m keeping some scenes, shuffling some around, and adding new ones. It’s been a fun juggling act 🥴😂

I don’t know how much of a plotter you are, but having a big picture idea of your plot is going to be super helpful. You don’t necessarily…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle I agree with @hybridlore ‘s statements! I think that bit about Leon’s reaction might’ve been what I felt was missing from the scene.

@ellette-giselle

Sorry, didn’t get tagged yesterday. I think Linus has a valid concern about the scene with Julian and Dian, but moving the scene where Julian shares the Gospel with him to a day or so later would fix it, in my opinion.

I think it was nice to see Julian argue with God a little bit. It’s slightly a different reaction than you…[Read more]

@theshadow

NICE!!

I really like it! I had hopes for Dylan and they seem to be coming through! Yay!!

@keilah-h    @linus-smallprint

So, keilah likes the scene that you have a problem with, linus! This is great. 🤣

Here’s an idea. What if I shift it a little so that the conversation happened a day or two after they had already been on the ship? Do you think that would work?

@linus-smallprint

Thanks for letting me know.

@keilah-h

Yay, can’t wait!!

@theshadow
Thank you! 🥰

@hybridlore

Thank you so much, that means a lot!

@hybridlore

Sorry to hear that, praying for you 💗

You got this, God will help you!!

@raxforge

Oh cool! Have you ever played a game? How does designing a character work? (If you’ve done that)

@keilah-h

Well, that’s more experience than me. XD

@theducktator

Oh, and did that pudding ever thicken?

NOOO it DIDN’T

The flavor is still good, though. :p

I would appreciate it if you guys could pray for me! My OCD’s been worse lately, and I’ve been feeling depressed some days. Just pray for healing for my OCD and that God would help me lean on Him and grow closer to Him.

@theshadow

Yay! It looks good! 😊 Looking forward to the next one!

so yeah, you can keep it, but only if it works with the story.