Loopy

@hybridlore

Unless he came back at the head of an army….. 😈

@ellette-giselle

Yeah, I gotcha. But it did catch me off guard.

I feel like he won’t … but I could be wrong. And if he betrayed them, he probably wouldn’t come back.

@hybridlore

Yes, but that was a direct scripture quotation, and I’m not going to add my country names into that. 😉

Are ya now? What if he betrays them?

@freed_and_redeemed

Ohhh, they look so good!!!

@ellette-giselle

The new section looks good too! It did confuse me when, in the letter, they mentioned that Jews were not better than Greeks. This seems kind of out of place in your fantasy world. Maybe cut that sentence, or you could put, Ardentans are not greater than those of the Empire? Or something like  that.

Anyway, good job! I’m ro…[Read more]

I spent my whole shower time thinking about this and I can explain a little better. Taking quotes from Book 1.

Chapter the 5th

Tyn watched her friend. She did not know what to say to him. Every time he had gotten in a mood like this before, she had told him he had full control over whether or not he used magic. Now she wondered if he really might…

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@koshka

Gotcha.

If it’s PTSD in particular I don’t have much. I have research on gas trauma from WW1, but otherwise I haven’t got a ton. I do have heaps of info on things happening during the war. Here’s two I have bookmarked.

h ttps://www.history.com/articles/history-of-ptsd-and-shell-shock

h ttps://www.youtube.com/watch?v=s651JQxSPlU

@linus-smallprint

So you’re saying she is motivated by independence, realizes this command from the king makes her look controlled, and so tries to justify it through her own moral code to still feel independent? Makes sense. But is something keeping her from switching sides in the first place? (Just digging a little)

@ellette-giselle @elishavet-pidyon

Forgot to reply quickly 😅 Yes I would appreciate any research you already have! I’ve already got tons of reading to do for the main parts of my thesis, and psychology is part of it, so any help is welcomed – although I’m going to look for articles on my own anyway. I’m trying to find ways of cutting time becau…[Read more]

@liberty

Black horse for a black rider.

What can I say?

@liberty

that’s all you have to say about that section?!?!

😂

@hybridlore  @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @liberty

NEXT SECTION!!

The sixteenth year of Emperor Haidronias’s reign
November 25th
The Empire

To Wolf, Peter, and the Church in Landstraten,
Greetings in Christ.

Our time in the Capital has been one filled with blessings and the grace of God. We have a sm…

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@rae

That ending won’t leave me alone!!!! Now that I’ve had time to really think about it….. man, it’s good. A delayed hit, but a hard one when it gets ya! 🤣

@hybridlore

No prob! You are 100% last though. 🤣

No wait…. Liberty hasn’t comment yet.

Never mind, you are 90% last. 😝

 

Whatever happened to the prince. . . *shudders* Creepy. Hopefully Leon and Julian will get to talk to him soon.

Yeah.. poor kid.

What do you think of Marius?

@rae

I saw that coming….. sort of.

I didn’t think he’d go back. I thought he would be killed in a fight.

I’m not sure what to think of that. Hmm.I like it, but almost feel doubtful for liking it.

The opening scene with Jenna and Baron may need a little work. It was very intimate and immediately led me to think that they were married.…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

The new section looks good. Sorry, I was at co-op and then had a lot of notifs when I got back so it was a little overwhelming.

Whatever happened to the prince. . . *shudders* Creepy. Hopefully Leon and Julian will get to talk to him soon.

@ellette-giselle @hybirdlore @theducktator @keilah-h

The Final Story.

Please note that I might drastically change this one later since I’m not 100% happy with it, but I’ve been changing and playing with this story for so long now that I feel like I need to post it, gather your thoughts (tips for how to make the story better and criticism very…[Read more]

@koshka bruh

First off, that’s one quarter, not one third, second, why did they have to put “60 million” and “20 million” twice?

@whalekeeper

That’s terrible. Praying!! 🙏