Linus Smallprint

@jonas

Thaliu. I liked the feel together.

@linus-smallprint

Ducktator, did you see that note I added on the idea of using a slave to push Alan in the direction of trusting and obeying The Saviour? What are your thoughts on that?

I’m not sure. I see how it would help your story, and it’s an interesting perspective to take. My main concern would be people thinking you support slavery. I…[Read more]

@jonas

That’s cool! Lol it’s funny cuz I was just thinking that a painting magic system would go good with one of my worlds. It’s not even the first time this has happened XD

@hybridlore

no!!! I can’t access this without my laptop!! 😭😭😭😭

I’ll let you know what I think the minute I get home!!

@jonas

My favorite is Chromancy.

@jonas

I think I like Spectrachromy/lurgy the best. I also like Chromamancy.

@to-whom-it-may-concern

If it’s okay, I’d like to add some characters. They’re all from the same WIP, but they don’t know each other.

Vyette

She’s an earth elemental. She is fairly tall, at 5′ 9”, and has medium brown skin, green eyes, and black braids streaked with green. Her father is the (rich) vice president, and she is an arrogant snob…[Read more]

@koshka @loopylin

Rax and Ben

Rax and Ben followed as well, for their next class was Foreign Literature as well. Rax saw that Syph was beginning to grow discomfort being surrounded by the much larger people. “Would you like to hop on my shoulder again?”

@rae

I like this a lot!! This section is good. I was trying to remember what happened beforehand. So far the stories have flowed, even though they are individual stories. This one seems a little out of place regarding the last one.

otherwise, i like this!!

@linus-smallprint

awesome! Glad I could be of help.

I think we’re all a little defensive of our stuff. 😂

I remember when you kept criticizing Aaron I was crushed because he’s a lot like me and I felt like you were criticizing me and saying I was a cardboard cutout. It took a few weeks for me to separate myself from him and see your cri…[Read more]

@theshadow

I really like this chapter! Everything critical I was going to say @hybridlore already covered.

I really enjoy these characters. I like how Jack sticks up for his sister, and I’m eager to find out what happens and where Elina got her scar!

make sure to keep tagging me because I’m really enjoying this.

and those girls giving her a h…[Read more]

@liberty

Feb. 15 sounds good, thx

@linus-smallprint

As a reader, is this a direction you would be satisfied to see the story take?

Yes

What do you think of the character development you see in this (specifically for Alan, Martha, Eric, and Cyrus)?

Seems solid.

Now that you’ve seen some more, what are your thoughts on the similarities between Eric and Kalmar?

I think it’s d…[Read more]

I just found out there will be no more pennies.😭😭😭They were my favorite coin. RIP.

@loopylin

As are 95% of the people in the roleplay, lol. You’d fit right in :]

Lol, okay. I think I will add a couple characters there.

@jonas

I may, but I’d need to read through, like, 40 pages, as that’s not one I stalk.😂

@loopylin

I’ve been thinking about joining the school RP, but I’m homeschooled, and therefore kind of clueless. I did however, read through all 400+ pages on a whim once, so there’s that.😂

@linus-smallprint

i really love the direction.

character development seems good and solid. But it’s hard to know that from just reading an outline.

again, it all depends on how you play it, but I was feeling Eustace and dragon change more than Kalmar and wolf. (Even though it is a wolf) I think you’re fine and should go for it. I can let you…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

I like this much better. I feel more comfortable, but it also plays into the allegory style better. (At least  in my opinion)

my only suggestion (besides fine combing because there were a few typos) is old be this paragraph.

I do not know what Alan thought as he used the spell, so instead of telling you that, let’s say he in…

[Read more]

Well, never mind. I forgot she was a fire elemental, so now I have to rewrite the whole scene anyway. *facepalm*

I can’t get my character out of a burning building. Help?