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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 days, 18 hours ago
Idk,
what do you think, @linus-smallprint ?
I’m leaning toward making him older.
I mean, if he’s in the position of spiritual leader, he needs to be mature.
Hybridlore, pick three characters and put them in your signature, and give the rest back. Understand me? (Adrian doesn’t count because he’s dead. so there.)
lololol
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 days, 18 hours ago
He’s going to try to answer that call for Church leaders that came from the town. The monumental things are how on earth he would even have a chance of getting out of the Capital with the lockdown. The minute he can get out, Joseph and whoever else would be off. So, to have the door open while he’s seventeen would be silly if he…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 days, 19 hours ago
Um, I want him to be redeemed. lol.
For this I want to see him reacting in shame. If this is a big deal, I need to see it as a big deal.
Like, what is the most shameful or embarrassing thing that ever happened to you? (Don’t actually answer that. lol) Think how it made you feel, and then put yourself in the woods with some…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 days, 19 hours ago
Somebody help me!!!!!!! I’m going insane!!!!!!
Okay, not really, but I am stuck and I’m having one of those uninspiring days when words are just black spots on a white screen.
If that makes sense.
Ugh.
Okay, so I am going to do something very monumental in Joseph’s life………… except I’m stuck.
I d…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 days, 19 hours ago
I normally do that, but this time I forgot. :/
Do you think it is okay to leave him like this, or should I put something else in to temporarily satisfy the reader?
I think we might be sim-understanding one another.
I don’t think Eric was ashamed ENOUGH. Like, the words on the paper said he was ashamed, but he didn’t feel…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 days, 21 hours ago
You can’t just steal all of them. Otherwise I won’t post anything else. Pic who you want and let the others go.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 days, 21 hours ago
On second thought, maybe I’ll leave Joseph alone and do bad things to Asher, Eric, Noah, Darrien, and OH! And SABINA!!!!!
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 days, 21 hours ago
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 days, 21 hours ago
Ugh. It deleted my reply.
I liked this chapter a lot, though I have read most of it. lol.
I feel like you kinda brushed over the shame thing with Eric, and I’m hoping that’s because he’s too freaked out to think though what happened. I hope to see some more repercussion of that later on.
I like how Alan and Tyn dealt with…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 days, 21 hours ago
What does this mean exactly?? 🤨
Wouldn’t you like to know.
That would have been the strangest acronym for a missionary story ever lol
I know, right!
all I’m saying is, if you’re gonna kill Joseph, make it completely different from Aaron’s and Adrian’s deaths. Have the Empire chuck him off a cliff or something, I don’t…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 days, 21 hours ago
What does this mean exactly?? 🤨
Wouldn’t you like to know.
That would have been the strangest acronym for a missionary story ever lol
I know, right!
all I’m saying is, if you’re gonna kill Joseph, make it completely different from Aaron’s and Adrian’s deaths. Have the Empire chuck him off a cliff or something, I don’t…
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The Ducktator replied to the topic Animal RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 5 days, 9 hours ago
I’d join, though I won’t be on much for about 2 weeks, until co-op is over for the semester.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 5 days, 16 hours ago
I know!!! It’s so sad!
I was freaking out when I wasn’t able to get on and the home page was dying.
My dad contacted them through their Facebook page before I was able to get on. He should try that.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Short Short Story Prompt War! in the forum General Writing Discussions 5 days, 16 hours ago
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 5 days, 16 hours ago
Duck tape? That must have been somewhat painful.
My kids have no idea what’s coming to them. lololololol.
When I reread your story, I weeded through the form and threw it into a word document so I would have access to it offline and could read it when I was taking the train to school or on a break at work. I still had the…
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Andrew McLaurin replied to the topic Talking about are Fanfics in the forum General Writing Discussions 5 days, 23 hours ago
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The Ducktator replied to the topic The magic Potato knows best in the forum Art 6 days, 12 hours ago
That actually is rather accurate.😅
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Quote Archive in the forum General Writing Discussions 6 days, 13 hours ago
Dad: “Online church isn’t real church!”
Me: “It’s like vegan sausage.”
AMEN TO THAT!!!
Why wouldn’t I bring a sword to a wedding?” -me
I dunno. I would.
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The Ducktator replied to the topic The Quote Archive in the forum General Writing Discussions 6 days, 15 hours ago
“Didn’t Shakespeare land on the moon once?”-me
“Why wouldn’t I bring a sword to a wedding?” -me
”Beer, whiskey, bourbon, gin, is what I drink!” -4yo sister
Dad: “Online church isn’t real church!”
Me: “It’s like vegan sausage.”
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Andrew McLaurin replied to the topic Talking about are Fanfics in the forum General Writing Discussions 6 days, 16 hours ago
Raxforge, you have not only outdone your theoretical competitor, but did so on the very day the completed form of his existence began. I salute you.
YAY! Much rejoicing.
check it out, we’re bonding over nonsense.
YAY! More rejoicing.
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