Linus Smallprint

@esther-c

Hi Esther. I actually had something similar to deal with in one of my books as well. Here are the two things I would say to keep in mind that will most likely make the difference.

1. There can be a time where the MC believes a lie as long as it is shown to be a lie by the end of the book. (i.e. There are some rough consequences…[Read more]

@keilah-h

lololol. I get that. The Tangled one was me with the Zero Hour: Freedom set.

@elishavet-pidyon

lol, well thanks. I get told I’m crazy or weird all the time. XD

haha. It’s not me always either. But I feel like readers view us as always thinking that. XD

@hybridlore

lol, thanks. XD

@grcr

You are very welcome!!

Okay sounds good.

Okay, for a little more editorial feedback…..

and Emrysrushed

Second to last paragraph, you just need a space there.

And then structurally,

Put your right hand to your chest…”

This seems a little odd, because 1. it is one of the more standard ways of swearing an oath, and 2. as a sol…[Read more]

@grcr

Ooo! This is interesting!!

(I actually thought the dad was gonna die in this chapter from scene 1…. so I’m relieved that he made it. XD)

A few typos I caught, but at this point I’m not sure what sort of feedback you’re looking for, so let me know. This is interesting and I’m eager to keep reading if you post more!

So man y kids… and…[Read more]

@theducktator

lol. No prob. XD

@loopylin

Rory

“Push you? If you’re sure…..” He stared in confusion for several moments. Then, bracing his hands against the back of the chair, he gave it a shove and let go, waiting to see what would happen.

@whalekeeper

Oh my goodness! He’s such a good sport tho to reply like that! XD

@theducktator

I’m glad you got through it with no huge mistakes. Colds always settle in my ears and I get sinus infections. Really bad ones. Colds can be nasty. I’ve never gotten dizzy from one though…… I think? 😄

Praying that it clears up.

@esther-c

praying for you, Esther!

Thank you. The performance went okay. I remembered all the choreography, but I didn’t perform as well as I could have, which is about as good as I could have hoped for feeling like this. I feel a little better now and I’m hoping the cold will be gone soon. The dizziness usually lingers annoyingly long.

@esther-c

I wish I’d thought of that when my grandma was in the hospital, but it was summer, so we were all barefoot anyway. My siblings and I were riding the elevators up and down. They were the fun kind where you could see out of the window.

@ellette-giselle

XD This is what I get for trying to post when sick… @rae the message several above was for you.

@ESTHER-C

YESSS!!!!! This is PERFECT right down to thanksgiving in the hospital hehehehe I am actually so happy you wrote that!

When I saw it in my email, I literally screamed and my dad was like “are you okay?” it was really funny, he was very concerned 😂😂

@theducktator

lol, thanks….. but I think that message was for @rae , unless you’re talking about something I wrote…. (which you very well might be with my track record…… XD)