Linus Smallprint

@hybridlore

One thing I’ve noticed is that you tend to use a lot of ellipses.

@theshadow

“Our house is full of ducks!!!!”

Ducks???👀

@linus-smallprint

hah!! That’s great! This is going to be so funny if I do!

@liberty

I’m going to be able to submit something!!!!!!!

@loopylin

Sure! They’re in the entrance right now.

Vyette

Vyette glared up at the school. A boarding school! How could her father do this to her? “It’s an experience,” he’d said. An experience? Maybe for the working class. She shoved another bag at her maid, who was already carrying four. “Come on. Don’t take all day.” She stalked into the…[Read more]

@theshadow

i am so relieved Jack is still there!! Also, I have a feeling I’m going to like Dylan.
just a hunch.

also, I’m not sure about Olivia and Adaline’s reaction. You see, when people bully others it tends to be because of insecurity and cowardice. I have yet to meet a truly confidant and courageous bully. That being said, they seem too c…[Read more]

@jonas

Thaliu. I liked the feel together.

@linus-smallprint

Ducktator, did you see that note I added on the idea of using a slave to push Alan in the direction of trusting and obeying The Saviour? What are your thoughts on that?

I’m not sure. I see how it would help your story, and it’s an interesting perspective to take. My main concern would be people thinking you support slavery. I…[Read more]

@jonas

That’s cool! Lol it’s funny cuz I was just thinking that a painting magic system would go good with one of my worlds. It’s not even the first time this has happened XD

@hybridlore

no!!! I can’t access this without my laptop!! 😭😭😭😭

I’ll let you know what I think the minute I get home!!

@jonas

My favorite is Chromancy.

@jonas

I think I like Spectrachromy/lurgy the best. I also like Chromamancy.

@to-whom-it-may-concern

If it’s okay, I’d like to add some characters. They’re all from the same WIP, but they don’t know each other.

Vyette

She’s an earth elemental. She is fairly tall, at 5′ 9”, and has medium brown skin, green eyes, and black braids streaked with green. Her father is the (rich) vice president, and she is an arrogant snob…[Read more]

@koshka @loopylin

Rax and Ben

Rax and Ben followed as well, for their next class was Foreign Literature as well. Rax saw that Syph was beginning to grow discomfort being surrounded by the much larger people. “Would you like to hop on my shoulder again?”

@rae

I like this a lot!! This section is good. I was trying to remember what happened beforehand. So far the stories have flowed, even though they are individual stories. This one seems a little out of place regarding the last one.

otherwise, i like this!!

@linus-smallprint

awesome! Glad I could be of help.

I think we’re all a little defensive of our stuff. 😂

I remember when you kept criticizing Aaron I was crushed because he’s a lot like me and I felt like you were criticizing me and saying I was a cardboard cutout. It took a few weeks for me to separate myself from him and see your cri…[Read more]

@theshadow

I really like this chapter! Everything critical I was going to say @hybridlore already covered.

I really enjoy these characters. I like how Jack sticks up for his sister, and I’m eager to find out what happens and where Elina got her scar!

make sure to keep tagging me because I’m really enjoying this.

and those girls giving her a h…[Read more]

@liberty

Feb. 15 sounds good, thx

@linus-smallprint

As a reader, is this a direction you would be satisfied to see the story take?

Yes

What do you think of the character development you see in this (specifically for Alan, Martha, Eric, and Cyrus)?

Seems solid.

Now that you’ve seen some more, what are your thoughts on the similarities between Eric and Kalmar?

I think it’s d…[Read more]