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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
Yes, that’s how to pronounce it, but it would be said with a thick German accent, not our American one, so it would sound a little different. It could also be said Helen with the “e” still added.
Oh, come on! Adrian wasn’t always dead. I would like to know what he was like when he was alive on earth.
Shy. Rather a bit of a coward s…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @liberty
SPECIAL NEXT SECTION!!! Part 2 of today!!!
The sixteenth year of Emperor Haidronias’s reign
October 27th
The EmpireWe spent all day today going up and down the streets. We mostly explored our surroundings, though we did talk with a few of the peo…
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
Oh no! @liberty beat me! XD
yesterday it was 80 degrees.
Today it’s 5 and snowing.
That’s rather strange . . . 🤔 Sounds like Colorado, but I don’t even think it’s that extreme there. Today we have a high of nearly 80.
He died in the beginning of book 2. Hybridelore almost killed me for it.
(it was a rather brutal scene………
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
Good morning!!! You’re bright and early! Normally Hybridlore is my first reader. Looks like you got her place! 😂
That makes sense about Conrad.
Can I know Conrad’s whole story?
The whole thing? Girl, it’s like a whole ‘nother book! I know the whole life of every character who has a name, (and even some who don’t). It’s just part of h…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @liberty
NEXT SECTION!!!
The sixteenth year of Emperor Haidronias’s reign
October 7th
The EmpireAs you will see by yesterday’s entries, I have returned to the Empire. It took all of yesterday to chronicle everything that happened to Ro…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
Neat! I loved the part of when the lion came to rescue them. As soon as I read about that lion I knew it was there to protect them!!!! That happened to a character of mine as well.
Cool!!! I really liked the idea of a Daniel twist. Plus, it gives me Narnia fkashbacks with Shasta in the desert. That just makes me happy. 😊
Hmm…the part w…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @liberty
NEXT SECTION!!!
Days passed, and slowly, Leon regained some of the strength he had lost. On the second week, he was told he could work if he wanted to, and he did so with a will. It was wonderful to be with Rolf again, and the work was not draining a…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @liberty
NEXT SECTION!!!
Interesting POV switch. A new technique I tried out for telling long stories rather then having a ton of first-person dialogue. Let me know what y’all think.
The sixteenth year of Emperor Haidronias’s reign
September 9th
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TheShadow replied to the topic The Woods of Rosen in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
@keilah-h @hybridlore @ellette-giselle @the_lost-journal @liberty @whalekeeper @linus-smallprint
New chapter, please tear into this.
Chapter 4
Dylan stopped abruptly, “Where’s the path?”
“What do you mean ‘where’s the path’?” Olivia shoved past Elina and Jack, gazing out ahead. A seemingly endless sea of trees met her.“Oh, great, nic…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @liberty
my loyal subjects, I beg pardon.
Tragedy has struck.
The dragon laptop ate LOS for breakfast! 😱
I was able to recover most of it, but alas I must be away to other duties.
No new sections until Monday. 😭
🐲
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
I really like him, and he’s very intriguing. He sounds like a character that could demand an entire book of his own! He reminds me of the monks who bought Squanto.
I was literally thinking, “This guy needs his own book!” while I was editing! 🤣
Oh wow, that’s brutal. But those are the stories I love best!! Stories of REAL s…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
I’VE BEEN WAITING FOR YOU TO READ THIS SECTION!!!!!!!!!
I’m so happy! I posted it and I was like, “Liberty’s gonna love this!!!”
Haha!!! I’m so glad I threw you a loop!!
Good! I’m glad you were scared for him! 😂
I’m so HAPPY!!!!!!!
So, this is really cazy because I never thought this scene was one of my best!!…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @liberty
NEXT SECTION!!
Time passed, and Leon’s wounds began to heal, leaving deep scaring in many places. However, his strength was harder to regain. Without good food, and surviving on only two meals a day, he had already begun to weaken. After the beating and…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
Ooo! No I haven’t!!
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
*grin* Yup. That never works for an excuse!
Yup. lololol.
Actually, that scene with Leon was inspired by a true account I read! Wonder if it’s the same one?
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @liberty
NEXT SECTION!!
The first thing he knew was the pain. He couldn’t remember having ever been in such terrible pain. Then he felt that he was lying on something softer than the ground, and someone was bathing his back with cool water.
“Will he be alright?” a…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @liberty
NEXT SECTION!!
One evening, Julian was walking home alone from visiting a family and bringing a basket of food Adeline had prepared for them. It was growing dusk, and he was almost out of the alleys when a voice hailed him. “You, stranger, it looks like y…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
Do you have an actual game this is based off?
There were several games like this medieval children played, and later on they evolved to Jacks and Marbles. So in a way, yes.
Aww!!!😍 I love this part!
Me too! So glad!!
I’m pretty sure Aelic is remembering the priest from his town when he says this…and how that guy wanted to sac…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
Oh, sorry for devastating you.
Hmmm. We’ll have to wait and see.
Did you see the section I posted today?
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @liberty
NEXT SECTION!!
The days passed, and Leon threw himself whole heartedly into the work. At first, the idea of completing at task well for someone who owned him was revolting. But after one long evening of prayer, Leon felt in his heart what was right, and…
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