Liberty

@linus-smallprint

I sure don’t enjoy it.

Do you think it’s fine as long as this is the last one……. (for a while.)

@linus-smallprint

Kind of. I did get a little hope, but when the mood switched I thought, “Okay. Here we go again. Do we have to be here for this?”

Oh.

I thought you said to go ahead and kill them.

Do you think it wasn’t good?

@linus-smallprint

i think so. He’s in the barn talking to martha

@linus-smallprint

Hmm, wow, must have really sobered you. No comment on the amount of exclamation marks. lol. After I posted it, I looked back and was like, “wow, there’s a lot.” lol.

And no comment on the fact that I offed Joseph’ best friends.

Ah. So there was a positive event in there. This is what you were referring too.

Yes, and I have a…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Maybe. This is a question I will ask at the end, but so far, what would the top scenes that you would like to see illustrations for be?

Ooo, I haven’t thought of this really.

Okay. well, the Stripe one of course. That would be super funny/cute, especially with his ears flat. lol.

Maybe one of Martha and Alan talking. I would…[Read more]

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Joseph sat at the table and stared at his plate. Noah and Darrien had already eaten and were pulling on their boots. They knew the hard day of work they had ahead, and they had been able to eat

Sabina put her arm over Joseph’s sh…

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@ellette-giselle

Noo! XD At least, I don’t think so. 🤔😉

@linus-smallprint

Yippy! Stripe was HUGGED!!!!

AWWWWW! it was soooooo cute!!!!!! Now you have to draw a picture of it!!!

Aside from Stripe being hugged, I really enjoyed the chapter.I’m glad you brought the crow back in. I was wondering how long it would be before you tied that part of the plot back into the story.

Also, one…[Read more]

@elishavet-pidyon

Woah, are you accusing me of being a sadist?

lololololol.

Thanks I’ll check it out!

@liberty @whoever is in this rp

So…I used to write animal fiction. In fact my first short story (written 2018) was about a jackrabbit and a meerkat. I stopped because it didn’t click for me, but I think I’m going to join anyways. So, sorry in advance if these charries are wobbly, I haven’t told stories about them for probably at least three or…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

By the way, this article isn’t (or maybe it is) about psychological suffering, but since I’m pretty sure it’s point is what you’re intending in your stories, I’ll share it. It definitely changed the way I think of pain.

And it’s hilarious, so you know. Thought you’d enjoy.…[Read more]

I’m no longer surprised when a character is taken/died. In fact, I was expecting it any time now. That’s not good.

Is it though? I mean sure, in modern storytelling that is a thing to reserve for smacking readers with, but could the fact that no one is safe almost be a shock in in of itself? Maybe I’ve read too much from early church histo…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Ok, I will say that I enjoyed how it was carried off in this section. I agree with what @linus-smallprint said about that. It reminded me of The Healer by Dee Henderson. (A book about facing the grief of a broken world.) Very good.

What I say is redundant is the fact that it feels like more characters are dying than those who…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

thanks so much for this feedback.

im not going to say anything so as not to shed light on which path i take, but i will say that it was extremely helpful knowing your thoughts.

thanks again!

@linus-smallprint

Why was I expecting this to be something positive?

You should know me better than that.

It kind of made the event feel like a slap. (Ouch. I’m feeling Josephs pain.)

Perfect! That’s exactly what I wanted.

It also feels more tragic because of how casually Eric and Asher headed out. It was just a normal day.

Ah yes. Poor b…[Read more]

@elishavet-pidyon

@hybridlore

Drat.

KP isn’t letting me know that y’all responded!

Grrr.

Hmm, it looks like I really stirred it up around here. lol.

@ellette-giselle

Eeellllllleeeeeeetttttttte………

Why shouldn’t you kill them? Well, because it’s getting redundant. I love your story and your characters. The setting has a unique feel of its own and the characters are compelling to say the least. However, unless you have a brand-new absolutely unseen point to make with more death, it may…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Ha! I got it right!

😢😢 Please tell me Eric and Asher don’t die too. There is too much death in this book. 😭

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Sorry it’s so short.

Joseph woke. For a long moment he lay, trying to figure out what was happening and where he was. He had been so exhausted he didn’t even remember lying down. There was an odd sound, a sound he knew he had heard many times be…

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@grcr

Many that live deserve death. And some that die deserve life.

~J.R.R. Tolkien.