Liberty

@rae

Okay, phew! Finally caught up. And yeah, Chapter 7 isn’t showing up for me… so I guess I’m not, lol.

The biggest things I noticed were again, really long paragraphs. I think it would be easier to read if you split them up, but it’s up to you.

And long sections of dialogue without tags, like this:

“You can…”

“Read, write, and speak i…

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@jonas

Okay, I actually don’t think I’ll join… Thanks, though!

@rae

Hi! (I’m Elishavet [obviously] and I don’t remember if I’ve met or otherwise greeted you because my brain just will not let me, so welcome to the Kingdom of Pen! It’s an honor to meet you, hopefully for the first time.)

I adore how unique your world is, even as you employ tropes and tools used elsewhere. It’s obviously your creation, and I…[Read more]

*comes out of the shadows where I have lurked in recent days*

@rae

Intriguing story. It doesn’t sound like anything I’ve read before, although considering that most of my favorite authors are long dead that may not be worth mentioning.

At any rate, I do not believe I have properly met you either. I am Koshka, a writer of middle-grade animal…[Read more]

@jonas

Oh yeah that’s happened to me before. Idk why. 🤷🏻‍♀️ If I have to edit a post, I’ll just edit it, copy it, then submit the edit just in case it deletes.

@savannah_grace2009

Aww, thanks!!

Plotting isn’t always easy for me, so that’s encouraging to hear. 😊

I’ll try to get to writing a RP later today, but I’m not sure if that will happen. 😅 I haven’t gotten to it this week because life has been pretty busy. 🙃

PRONUNCIATIONS
Note: pronunciations are in alphabetical order rather than by revelance.

Of characters:

Aiqa _ Aye-quh

Akin _ Aye-kin

Alin _ Aye-lin

Azio _ Ah-zee-oh

Budeca _ Buh-deck-ka

Canin _ Cane –in

Gaygarum _ gey-gar-rum

Ginja _ Gin-juh

Grostoff _ Grew-stof, staff with an ‘o’

Hallia _ Hall-ee-uh

Jonas _ Joe-nas

Knihan _ Knee-…

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Take your time reading, I just wanted to post them and get feedback so i know how to change them

CHAPTER 9-THE DEAL
Nahim tapped his foot in the rhythm of the song he hummed. Master Paul leaned back in the pilot seat next to him, maneuvering through a bunch of asteroids before picking up his direction and heading into Cubespace. Nahim suddenly stopped his noise as a bright nebulae passed by with a flash. Master Paul smiled.

“You like n…

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Tell me if Chapter 7 is missing. Cuz I edited it, and I thought it got deleted so i tried to repost it, but then it said I had already posted it.

@freedomwriter76

Leon! My darling Leon! Noooooooo…

And Riker! That’s not true! Both of you need so much healing. And prayer. And just, ugh.

Seriously Leon, try coffee. It’s much better for you.

CHAPTER 8-AIQA
Nahim tossed his sword handle up in the air and grasped it with his left hand. He pitched it again, twirled it, gripped it, and held it with one finger (or at least tried to, his green sword was hefty). He played with the blue one in his right. Master Paul glanced at the movement in the co-pilot seat.

“You seem to be somewhat o…

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@jonas

Thanks!

I just literally figured that out about ten seconds ago and edited a post I was making and it deleted. Woops.

CHAPTER 7-THE INVESTIGATONS
The suns were bright and shining over Ladance as two Laxdains came walking together through the dusty streets. One was taller, dressed in red coarse, but durable, clothing with a powerful blaster strapped to his side, from his thigh to his knee. The other was shorter, but with tailored and comfortable clothes, and a…[Read more]

@hybridlore @power @freedomwriter76 @euodia-vision @kyronthearcanin @jonas @loopylin @whalekeeper @anyone-else-who-might-have-slight-interest

CHAPTER 6-ON BOARD THE NIGHTMARE
Nahim was alone and unbothered for the first time in a while. He ran his right hand over his sling for his left arm but didn’t try to move the shoulder. He was different…

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@hybridlore @power @freedomwriter76 @euodia-vision @kyronthearcanin @jonas @loopylin @whalekeeper @anyone-else-who-might-have-slight-interest

Next chapter…I’m just going to post most of my chapters now since I plan to change some of them soo, but want some feedback.

CHAPTER 5-MASTER PAUL
Mandin adjusted the thick band to the satchel over his…

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@highscribeofaetherium

Thanks. I’ll try doing my first mood board. **Me getting a sinking feeling that I’m going to fail**

How do you guys make your mood boards? I understand what you put on them, but how do you put them together?